Muse Critque

[twonations]

• No pointless comments. Telling someone you love them is cute, but not a critique. Tell them what they are doing right/wrong and why, and offer tips or pointers. Comments such as "my only critique is that you need to be around more", are extremely discouraged.
• No bashing. Please keep your critiques polite and constructive. That doesn't mean you

Comments

[ayo]

✿ rakuen-yodan
muse(s): ayo

he's been at r-y for almost two months now, just looking for some feedback~

[ayo]

There's something about your Jinki that feels really off, to the point where I'm not even sure it's Jinki you're trying to play at all. The emoticon use and chat speak is off putting enough but the fact that he seems to only pick and choose who he wants to talk to is upsetting as well, especially because he often seems to ignore people he should be close to. He seems to lack personality in the sense that perhaps you're trying to play him as awkward or closed off, but it's exaggerated to the point that, in showing nothing, he really gives zero for other people to go off as well - like there's nothing actually below the surface to dig down and get to. I think that these are all things that can be improved on, but it will definitely take some effort. Having him around more often and interacting more with the people he should could also help things, so hopefully you stick with it!

[ayo]

all i can do is agree that jinki hasn't been himself lately and it's been hard bringing him back to the muse he once was, but i am working on it. i think being in such a big home is a bit off putting for me but i am trying to get in the groove of it. i thought he was getting on quite well with the people he's spoken to and are friends with, so my apologies if he's come off rude or like he was ignoring anyone. thank you for your critique, i will definitely keep it in mind.

[ayo]

I'd have to agree that your Jinki seems nothing like the real. Just his manner of speaking, the things he says, everything down to his choice of songs, everything seems off. I feel like I'm looking at an OC with his face. And if I'm correct in knowing your other muses, they all seem very similar. Very one note and difficult to talk to. Maybe more effort on your side of the conversation is needed? Trying to say things that can be responded to.

[hyperionated]

✿ musicontop
muse(s): hyperionated

✿ barbuddha
muse(s): jongkooks / nagatomo

[masuda]

Hey there~ I'm commenting from this journal because I'm lazy lazy and not going to log out (-_-;) Kame doesn't get to talk to Sayaka much, but I'm pretty sure that's got something to do with the age gap present there, and the fact that wow, that blast is pretty hard to keep up with sometimes! I'm sure that they'll get the opportunity to chat in the future. Don't give up on her! Personally I lovelovelove Happiness and it's the greatest thing to see anyone else with an interest in them!

[hyperionated]

From what we have seen of Kame, I really admire how he takes the time to really comment people and try to talk in the blast with the others. He's really sweet and I haven't come across many Kames nor do I know much about him, but yours definitely gets an A+ and a thumbs up from me! Don't give up on him, either! I really do hope Sayaka and Kame can chat personally one day, it might be fun to try and get over the whole age gap thing! She really admires him as an artist, actor, and senpai!

[yeolchan]

i don't have a ton to say at the moment or enough time to say it because my battery is dying but we ADORE baekhyun so much already. the reals seem to have such an odd chemistry and they're both so silly. we've had so much fun talking to him the two times they have. this is my first time in a long time playing a guy and so i'm feeling a little awkward at it! but seriously, it's just been a blast so far with you two. ♥

[cryptologist]

✿ Clubhoused
muse(s): cryptologist

✿ homeless / psl
muse(s): foreverlasts / tonightsheaven

[cryptologist]

I think you've improved so much!

[cryptologist]

Thank you.

[cryptologist]

We love foreverlasts, yura! She is so great. :[!!
We hope to see her around more often and selfishly want her back on performers.

That is all. ^^;

[masuda]

✿ barbuddha
muse(s): erabu

✿ homeless
muse(s): masuda

[minecrafts]

personally i like kame. akina finds him strangely funny, and it's interesting to watch him and sometimes actually chat together (!! i know shocking because i am the worst at signing on so this never happens) because it's clear there are layers there not necessarily visible to the outside observer. he's an onion just sitting there and akina wants to peel him and see what's underneath!

... that might just be a strange amount of interest to have in someone you barely know, but there you have it.

[masuda]

It's okay, I'm pretty bad about actually replying even if I have him signed in most of the time. Since I started playing J, AIM definitely became my weakest... point. If you want, they could always PM back and forth or catch each other around in the blast/whenever it is they do! Even if it's strange, it's a good thing! :)

[masuda]

I get that Kame's real is a jerk, and that's fine. However when Kame does jerk stuff IC and gets called on it, you as a mun have a fit and say "WHY ARE YOU PICKING ON MY MUSE?" The muse also tends to have this persecution complex when people target him after he's done something boneheaded. If the real is like that, then fine, but I see a lot of it coming directly from you as a mun.

If you want to play a jerk muse, prepare to have people react to him when he's being a jerk. Please don't act like a victim because a lot of the negativity directed at Kame is a direct result of his actions and attitude towards other people.

[insoo]

✿ rakuen-yodan
muse(s): Insoo

If there's anything at all, I'd appreciate it. ♥

[stylomecon]

When you first claimed Insoo in our home he was a little more on the quiet side(?), and a little harder to get close to in my opinion. Then he disappeared out of sight completely and we wondered if he had faded, so we were happy to see him around again! And more engerized! :3 Gyuri loves playing around with him, as well as she feels that he's someone that she can go to if needed. <3 The quiet side is a faded memory! <3

I used to keep track of MYNAME a little bit more than now, but I think that you do depict him quite well. I have yet to see how your muse reacts around his bandmates in a scene, but from what I see through comments with his bandmates, you got it down there too. :3

Just keep him around! We'll continue bugging you if you guys bug us :3

[insoo]

First of all thank you for this comment! I'm glad for any feedback especially since I know it's hard for most people to crit on a band as new as they are. I did have trouble with him to begin with, but I'm really glad he's begun to reach out more and develop a much stronger voice. Insoo is very grateful for Gyuri as well, he considers her one of his close friends and one of the first people who reached out to him even in the beginning. :)

Thank you, I hope he comes off that way, sometimes I do worry I've gone in the complete wrong direction, but still carefully trying to see what more I can learn about him. ^^

Will do, of course! ^^ thank you again~