FIC: Out of the Frying Pan

[twilights_blue]

Title: Out of the Frying Pan
Author: twilights_blue
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Language
Word Count: 1.757
Summary: “You smell. It makes beasts notice.” Elisa stood and began rummaging through the boxes of tea that lined the wall behind her. “Have a seat, and I’ll see what I can do to help with the problem.”
Author's notes: First entry for the month of July for brigits_flame. I

Comments

[twilights_blue]

Yeah, I have trouble finding the right balance between description and dialog. It's one of the reasons why I have to practice, in my opinion. Are there any spots you could point out that messed with the pacing? Just for future reference.

Thanks for the comment. Glad you like it. :D

[twilights_blue]

Picky is good! I'm a big nitpicker myself, so every little detail counts.

I knew the tea-brewing-thing was going to come back to bite me when I wrote it. I really just have to work on my in-world timing, I guess.

The scene with the siren actually went through several variations before I finally wrote it. I was wavering between an actual fight scene and a simple hand-over. In the former, Balt would have killed the siren in order to get the entirety of her blood. In the latter, only a small amount was needed, but sirens are so selfish over the magical properties of their own blood that they're reluctant to share. I think, perhaps, if I had had more time to mull it over, I would have gone with the fight scene just to add, as you said, more difficulty to the item gathering.

I think a bit of a problem for me this week was the deadline. I wrote all of this Saturday evening, and wasn't home on Sunday to edit any of it. Maybe sorting my time out better for this week may help me out a lot.

Thanks for all of this. It certainly did help. :D

[alabasterowls]

LOVE!!!

That is all.

[twilights_blue]

Thanks! :3

[leticiae]

They're lives just got a bit more complicated, didn't it.

That was terrific! I loved the camaraderie between these two. It was an easy flow of dialog. The Tea Cozy title cracked me up along with some other lines in the story.

Will there be more of this? I really enjoyed it.

[twilights_blue]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I don't know if there will be more (I made this up competely off the top of my head for the competition), but I may have to see if I can develop the overall world and see if any more writing happens.

Thanks for commenting. :3

[kithlyara]

This was a really fun story to read! I enjoyed it greatly. Will there be more? I love how Balt and Lucas interact with each other!

[twilights_blue]

I haven't planned on writing more, honestly. This was an idea I solely made up for the week's competition, and it went through several reiterations before I settled on this. With all of this interest, though, I may have to see what I can do with furthering the plotline.

Thanks for the comment. :]

[greenwillow27]

This is a very appealing story, or part of a larger story. I like the two characters' interactions. I think the emphasis on dialogue works well and doesn't take away from what is going on action-wise.
Cute story!