The air was stale, a horrible mixture of mold and the coppery tang of blood surrounding him as he drew in shuddering breaths, pressed against the cold concrete wall. A low crackling filled the room and soon the cheery sing-song voice of the Knight of Ten blared over the loudspeakers
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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!scribblestormMarch 24 2012, 23:17:17 UTC
G-G-Ginooooooooooo??????? ;_________;
I don't actually mind that we don't see any gore (yet); the way you ended it leaves the mind to conjure up all sorts of images on its own, whether it likes to or not, so I think you cut it off at the perfect spot, really. (And, nice nod to canon there. I'd immediately assumed this was AU, but now I'm not discounting some horrible post-R2 where it turns out Bradley lived).
Re: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!orange_kitty521March 24 2012, 23:24:45 UTC
oh look, I discovered the next partl!
and they broke out using the awesomeness of Suzaku's geass combined with Gino's....pretty blue eyes :D and they took out Bradley and lived together with much hugs and tea and stuffed red pandas. The End :D
I'm glad that you're okay with where it ended as I don't think I can write gore very well (especially not when Gino is concerned). And is it wrong that I'm suddenly wanting this to be a horrible post-R2 where Bradley lives? Especially if it's concerning a certain wormish plot bunny??? :DDD
This really is gripping and scary, and you handled a rather difficult prompt very well. Very visual -- I like that. I like that you didn't go all out on the violence, the real horror is usually psychological. And I think Suzaku's terror is very palpable here?
That and Bradley enjoying all of this is terrifying too.
[Dare: Write a drabble, geassverse, must contain either penguins, star gazing, or duck feeding.]
Having ignored Lloyd's careless, half-hearted warning that taking the Lancelot out into the middle of the desert off the books would 'come back to bite him in the rear end,' it was understandable then that A.S.E.E.C.'s was the last number he was going to dial at this point.
"You.... (pffft)... what?"
Suzaku sighed, massaging the bridge of his nose. "I'm not going to say it again, Gino." This was a bad idea. Maybe he should have just called Schneizel. He wasn't sure which was worse, the threat of demotion or his own colleague's barely stifled laughter over a static-filled line.
"Yeah, I know, I heard you. It's just... ahaha, really?"
Scratch that. Perhaps he just ought to dial Lelouch, right, inform the head of the Black Knights that the Lancelot was stranded alone in the middle of the desert, out of power, with its pilot vulnerable and without backup. See how long that Geass buys him. "Look, if you're just going to make fun of me
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^___________^ Yay! *throws more confetti* I'm glad you liked it! (I was gonna try to shoot for all three, but I couldn't reconcile ducks and penguins in the same setting. FAILME)
haha that would be pretty hard to do, "look Suzaku, the rare and elusive desert penguin! It's traveling with a flock of ducks! lets go feed them! :DDDD"
had to end it /there/ or it would have grown FAR TOO long.transient_wordsMarch 25 2012, 00:50:49 UTC
WRITE ME BRADLEY BEING ANGRY WITH/JEALOUS OF/ALL OF THE ABOVE (preposition) GINO AND TAKING HIS REVENGE BY (verb-of-your-choice) GINO'S MAYBE/MAYBE-NOT BOYFRIEND SUZAKU :D :D :D .....drabble :D
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Bradley knows something is up when Gino and Suzaku return to the base with flushed faces, slightly ragged clothes, and far more touchy-feely than protocol deems appropriate (Gino leaning his hand on Suzaku's shoulder, whispering into his ear, and Suzaku not pushing him away, but smiling with a touch of shyness and playfulness -)
And the worst is that it doesn't stop , but continues with Gino being even more cheerful (read: annoying) than usual. But Bradley doesn't care about that. He's learnt to channel out exasperating people
( ... )
Re: had to end it /there/ or it would have grown FAR TOO long.orange_kitty521March 25 2012, 01:00:53 UTC
WHERE IS THE REST OF THIS I NEED IT LIKE I NEED AIR!!!!!!
I love Bradley's....possessiveness for lack of a better word. And all the small details that show Suzaku and Gino's relationship. It paints a very pretty mind picture. <3
Re: had to end it /there/ or it would have grown FAR TOO long.scribblestormMarch 25 2012, 01:05:36 UTC
F-FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF
NEXT PART WHERE???! NEXT PART WHERE??!??! *tears apart floorboards of LJ-house like a lunatic*
Interestingly enough, I like how the narration sort of breaks down near the end. It starts off with Bradley calmly narrating and even deconstructing things, but by the end you can see there's a hint of something definitely angry, almost desperate there. Whether it was fully deliberate or not, it works extremely well as a device and I loved it!
Luciano Bradley considered himself a very patient man, and as every patient man will tell you, the things you want are worth waiting for. So he waited. He waited, and he watched as that flippant blond paraded his relationship with the dirty eleven around, (stealing soft kisses in dark corridors when they thought no one was looking or letting a friendly hug linger a bit too long), and he very discreetly watched as the Knight of Three pressed his lips to the furrowed brow of the smaller boy with a soft touch on the brunette’s chin and an even softer promise (‘I’ll be back before you know it, now don’t get too lonely without me’). It was such a touching moment, almost heart breaking and Bradley felt like Lord Weinberg deserved a present when he returned
( ... )
Your Bradley is always a treat ^__^. (“Do you always act like a little whore with him, or do I just do it better?” -- fffff love ♥) In any case, I think it was clever to cut right before the action and skip right to the results, leaving us to fill in all the delicious painful details. Poor Gino though! That can't be a good sight to come home to.
awww my Bradley is always willing to please fufufufu. and yes,I had faith that your mind could fill in allll the lovely little details :D. I do feel bad for Gino, it seemed like he was just starting to get Suzaku to open up and then this happens, which will most likely make him shut himself in again.
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I would never kill Suzaku off. Others are far less /safe/.
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I don't actually mind that we don't see any gore (yet); the way you ended it leaves the mind to conjure up all sorts of images on its own, whether it likes to or not, so I think you cut it off at the perfect spot, really. (And, nice nod to canon there. I'd immediately assumed this was AU, but now I'm not discounting some horrible post-R2 where it turns out Bradley lived).
Still ;____; Ginoooooo.... /whines
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and they broke out using the awesomeness of Suzaku's geass combined with Gino's....pretty blue eyes :D and they took out Bradley and lived together with much hugs and tea and stuffed red pandas. The End :D
I'm glad that you're okay with where it ended as I don't think I can write gore very well (especially not when Gino is concerned). And is it wrong that I'm suddenly wanting this to be a horrible post-R2 where Bradley lives? Especially if it's concerning a certain wormish plot bunny??? :DDD
*gives you a panda* I'm sorry
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This really is gripping and scary, and you handled a rather difficult prompt very well. Very visual -- I like that. I like that you didn't go all out on the violence, the real horror is usually psychological. And I think Suzaku's terror is very palpable here?
That and Bradley enjoying all of this is terrifying too.
(Poor Gino ._.)
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Having ignored Lloyd's careless, half-hearted warning that taking the Lancelot out into the middle of the desert off the books would 'come back to bite him in the rear end,' it was understandable then that A.S.E.E.C.'s was the last number he was going to dial at this point.
"You.... (pffft)... what?"
Suzaku sighed, massaging the bridge of his nose. "I'm not going to say it again, Gino." This was a bad idea. Maybe he should have just called Schneizel. He wasn't sure which was worse, the threat of demotion or his own colleague's barely stifled laughter over a static-filled line.
"Yeah, I know, I heard you. It's just... ahaha, really?"
Scratch that. Perhaps he just ought to dial Lelouch, right, inform the head of the Black Knights that the Lancelot was stranded alone in the middle of the desert, out of power, with its pilot vulnerable and without backup. See how long that Geass buys him. "Look, if you're just going to make fun of me ( ... )
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This is perfect! absolutely perfect and wonderful and so cute! Nicely done, Scribbles. <3
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.....drabble :D
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Bradley knows something is up when Gino and Suzaku return to the base with flushed faces, slightly ragged clothes, and far more touchy-feely than protocol deems appropriate (Gino leaning his hand on Suzaku's shoulder, whispering into his ear, and Suzaku not pushing him away, but smiling with a touch of shyness and playfulness -)
And the worst is that it doesn't stop , but continues with Gino being even more cheerful (read: annoying) than usual. But Bradley doesn't care about that. He's learnt to channel out exasperating people ( ... )
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I love Bradley's....possessiveness for lack of a better word. And all the small details that show Suzaku and Gino's relationship. It paints a very pretty mind picture. <3
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SO YOU TELL ME.
I do imagine Bradley being ...possessive, yes. Don't really know how else to describe it either :D
(And yes, those Gino and Suzaku's bits were fun to write, if a bit sad :/)
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NEXT PART WHERE???! NEXT PART WHERE??!??! *tears apart floorboards of LJ-house like a lunatic*
Interestingly enough, I like how the narration sort of breaks down near the end. It starts off with Bradley calmly narrating and even deconstructing things, but by the end you can see there's a hint of something definitely angry, almost desperate there. Whether it was fully deliberate or not, it works extremely well as a device and I loved it!
NOW TELL US WHAT HAPPENS NEXT *bricked*
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Now that we have that out of the way *cough*....
Your Bradley is always a treat ^__^. (“Do you always act like a little whore with him, or do I just do it better?” -- fffff love ♥) In any case, I think it was clever to cut right before the action and skip right to the results, leaving us to fill in all the delicious painful details. Poor Gino though! That can't be a good sight to come home to.
Lovely touch with the branding though, yummmm
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awww my Bradley is always willing to please fufufufu. and yes,I had faith that your mind could fill in allll the lovely little details :D. I do feel bad for Gino, it seemed like he was just starting to get Suzaku to open up and then this happens, which will most likely make him shut himself in again.
I do love the branding, too much.
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This-this is scary. I mean you didn't write it out but fkfjkfjfkjfkfjf
fkjfkjfkfjfk
(The imagery at the end -- very vivid, and scary.)
(You have very vivid prose <3)
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