Post Judas on a Pole - Chapter 2

[tracgyrl]

 So it's Saturday and I've been home all day. It's raining PIGS outside! I promised myself I'd keep posting chapters of my Bones fic, so here goes chapter 2.

Title: undetermined (Post Judas on a Pole)
Author: tracgyrl
Rating: undetermined ::this chapter is PG::
Category: Bones Season 2
Content: B/B, H/A, B/C friendship
Genre: Angst, Romance
Foreword: This

Comments

[noncanontv_girl]

Okay, for constructive criticism, from this chapter and the last, it feels like Brennan's thoughts in italics are a bit ooc.

Ex: "I wonder what he's doing....his stomach's probably growling.....I wonder if he wants to go for Thai?"

I just really don't picture any of this going on in her head. I don't picture her being weird or girly about Booth at all -- not even in her thoughts. It's part of what I love about her on the show.

That said, I know that this is fanfic and the point of fanfic is to give these characters we love so much something more than what TV is allowed to give us. I just wanted to give a little cc due to your note on feedback.

Moving on, Angela and Cam are just totally spot-on. I loved Ang's line about Dumb and Dumber from the last chapter. And I love Cam's stoicism about Booth and his feelings for Brennan.

[tracgyrl]

I REALLY appreciate your constructive criticism! Thanks for being so candid! It took me a long time to be tolerant of Cam, but now I'm having so much fun with her in my fic! I'm really glad that you're enjoying it overall!

[noncanontv_girl]

No problem! Actually in chapter 3, I felt Brennan's thoughts were alot more in character.

And I feel the same way about Cam! Ooooh you should have seen me when she first came on the scene -- I was so not happy with her. But time progressed, and I think the writers did a good job of not making her too unbearable.

[tracgyrl]

Yeah I was LIVID about Cam at first, but I've slowly warmed to her character. I agree that the writers did a good job making her slowly tolerable.

[etilia76]

I really like the conversation between Cam and Booth here - I can actually picture Camille in that situation :) I've learned to like her a lot recently and while being a B/B shipper, I do enjoy her friendship with him.

[tracgyrl]

I feel EXACTLY the same way! I'm having a really good time writing Cam in my fic, and I'm really enjoying writing her FRIENDSHIP with Booth. It's really coming in handy for me, so I'm glad that comes across here.

Nice quote

[anonymous]

Remember -- only 10% of anything can be in the top 10%.

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[obsidianagirl]

THANK YOU FOR ENDING THE CAM THING!!!!

Going to read more...
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