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Beautifully Broken: Chapter Five

Dec 31, 2009 13:16

Title: Beautifully Broken
Author: E.E. Kelley
Summary: Without Christopher to keep him hidden, Wikus was quickly found by the MNU and forced back into captivity. The transformation too far along, there was little the officers could do but allow it to complete itself. Yet, even after he has become fully Prawn, they keep him around, determined to use ( Read more... )

district 9, science fiction, fic: beautifully broken, fanfiction

Comments 35

rikunghts December 31 2009, 19:05:17 UTC

Wow. The detail you've put into this is just amazing. It's incredibly developed and honestly, I can see this becoming the sequel. It just plays out so vividly in my mind. This was well worth the short wait.

A post on terminology would be really neat and helpful. I for one would enjoy it.

Alas, you've spoiled me for every other D9 fanfic. I love the interactions between all the characters so far, and I love how there seems to be different opinions of Wikus. I can't wait to see what you'll do with this next.

topsell February 4 2010, 19:31:31 UTC

I will be posting the terminology when I reach chapter 10 -- until then I'm going to be slowly introducing a few more concepts.

New chapter up. I'm a jerk for making everyone wait so long. Won't happen again.

ankeelv2 December 31 2009, 19:25:59 UTC

God, I'm dying for you to keep updating this. XD The interactions are smooth and work well and are totally IC. And as Rikunghts said above me, damn you put a lot of detail into this-- and it really shows.

I think my only critique would be to watch your tenses-- you switched into present up towards the beginning, and then kept going with past. It was a little jarring-- but again, nothing huge. <3

topsell December 31 2009, 19:34:17 UTC

I noticed I was doing that right before I was about to post this. This chapter in particular was bad with that because I got stuck a few times and wrote it in a few seperate sittings. I do plan on editing over, but I want to finish Chapter 6 first ^_^

ankeelv2 December 31 2009, 19:35:19 UTC

Haha, and like I'm gonna complain about you wanting to write first.

topsell December 31 2009, 19:38:31 UTC

I just realized your first icon is from the LOTR (I'm thinking ROTK) animated movie! Just for that you're made of win!!

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sixelsixel December 31 2009, 19:26:05 UTC

I'll admit it, I kept coming back to check for this chapter.
My diligence was rewarded.
Excellent chapter, can't wait for more!
(as for updating, it's up to you, I don't mind either way)

topsell December 31 2009, 19:44:52 UTC

I felt a little bad about posting so late, but I got stuck on this chapter in all honesty. I wrote it and then nearly re-wrote it. DX The first version was ready pretty much the day I posted Chapter 4, I'm just a super perfectionist it seems...

sixelsixel December 31 2009, 19:58:19 UTC

Don't worry, it came out great in the end.
Take as much time as you need
I'll be here
on the EDGE OF MY SEAT :D

topsell February 4 2010, 19:29:01 UTC

Well new chapter finally up. I went on an inpromptu hiatus and that will not be happening again ^o^ No more long long waits!

Yea! dreamerchaos December 31 2009, 20:02:36 UTC

Yea for new chapter!

Really awesome how this is progressing. I can't help but to sit at the edge of my seat.

I like the idea of posting the terminology and etc., just in case someone like myself just needs a helpful reminder.

dreamerchaos: "Wait...the 'The' guys...who were they again?" *laughs*

Re: Yea! topsell February 4 2010, 19:29:57 UTC

Terminology post should be up around when I get to the 10th chapter or so. I'm compiling it but want to introduce a few more concepts before I add anything like that directly ^o^

karaq December 31 2009, 20:09:10 UTC

......DUDE, that was AWESOME (and I can licve with the name; Kreh'te - it grows on you) :-)

As always, I adore the details you've put into the story - such things always make fics seem well-thought through. I'm really glad you put up 'notes' as well. I hope you'll continue with that.

Poor Wikus *hugs him*. It was good he reconized Cristopher, though ^^

More soon, please? (somehow I think I end every comment to this verse with that sentence)

~KaraQ

topsell February 4 2010, 19:33:22 UTC

The chapter I just posted is a bit slow -.- but I didn't really have much of a choice. It'll be moving forward a bit more in chapter seven -- which I should have up Saturday or Sunday depending.

As for his name, I really needed something that sounded like it was "clicked" in the way the prawns spoke and I think that Kreh'te works well enough. Not sure if I'm 100 percent pleased with it but I'll leave it for now.