Beautifully Broken: Chapter Five

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Title: Beautifully Broken
Author: E.E. Kelley
Summary: Without Christopher to keep him hidden, Wikus was quickly found by the MNU and forced back into captivity. The transformation too far along, there was little the officers could do but allow it to complete itself. Yet, even after he has become fully Prawn, they keep him around, determined to use

Comments

[ankeelv2]

God, I'm dying for you to keep updating this. XD The interactions are smooth and work well and are totally IC. And as Rikunghts said above me, damn you put a lot of detail into this-- and it really shows.

I think my only critique would be to watch your tenses-- you switched into present up towards the beginning, and then kept going with past. It was a little jarring-- but again, nothing huge. <3

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I noticed I was doing that right before I was about to post this. This chapter in particular was bad with that because I got stuck a few times and wrote it in a few seperate sittings. I do plan on editing over, but I want to finish Chapter 6 first ^_^

[ankeelv2]

Haha, and like I'm gonna complain about you wanting to write first.

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I just realized your first icon is from the LOTR (I'm thinking ROTK) animated movie! Just for that you're made of win!!

[ankeelv2]

:D Awww yeah what now. God, it just made me lol so hard-- both the movie and the icon. Also your icon is both fascinating and slightly terrifying.

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It's Fizzgig from The Dark Crystal in a magical loop!
Movie Scene Now I need to go back and rewatch the animated LOTR movie...I just finished rereading the series too!

[ankeelv2]

I swear to god I'll do that whenever I don't get my way. but thank you, that actually solves many questions for me.

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It's a perfectly legitimate way to react to not getting your way! The only problem is, I'm not a crazy rat-dog monster with double rows of teeth...and I'm not so sure I can make that epic sound...

[ankeelv2]

But BY GOD WE CAN TRY.

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That we can. Though, until I can master it fully, I've been contemplating making a puppet of Fizzgig just for the hell of it.

[ankeelv2]

Not gonna lie, that'd be adorable. And you could just throw fits that way!

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'd just carry it around in my bag and whenever something I didn't like happened would have the perfect tool to express my rage with!

WHY MUST YOU HAVE SUCH EPIC ICONS! *gawps at the amazingness*

[ankeelv2]

Dude, speak for yourself. I was loling over your Voldy icon just now. XD And dude, it's totally better than a stress ball.

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XD I need more icon slots (is going to be buyign them).

And the first time I saw the Voldy icon my reaqction wa pretty much the same...