Jump!
“Jump!”
Junsu and Yoochun shoved at Boa playfully, her little body tightening at every impact of their playful palms. Olivia sat on the rocky cliff, absorbing the warm twilight as she overlooked Lake Khyron in peaceful detachment, reveling in the gently sinking temperature. Dozens of stars and distant worlds, varying in size and brilliance, ( Read more... )
Junsu and Yoochun shoved at Boa playfully, her little body tightening at every impact of their playful palms. Olivia sat on the rocky cliff, absorbing the warm twilight as she overlooked Lake Khyron in peaceful detachment, reveling in the gently sinking temperature. Dozens of stars and distant worlds, varying in size and brilliance, ( Read more... )
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*dies*
That was amazing! And like... epic! And so... I don't even know. I loved it so much. I like, went on a rant to my best friend just now about how much I love it and she's looking at me like I'm crazy. lol. Half the time I was like, "Damn it Boa, JUMP!"
And you probably know how much I love a good metaphor, and oh how metaphoric the whole situation with Boa and the Boys was of the internal battle Olivia was having with herself... Obvious metaphor is obvious, but I love it none the less.
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When I was in 10th grade, my teacher would yell at us if we picked out metaphors that were "too obvious." Like, overlying or parallel ones. And I would always say things like, "the obvious metaphor was my favorite," and then get yelled at. So the parallelism between Boa's situation and Olivia's was considered an "obvious metaphor" to her. I guess I wasn't thinking about the fact that it sounds strange if you weren't in that class... sorry.
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And u didnt offend me or anything, if that's what u thought.
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LOVE this line!!! I think you hit on that moment, at least for me, where I wonder just what I look like when I'm nervous and talking to someone I like. Awesome!! And I gotta say, one thing that struck me while I was reading this is how spot-on your descriptions were of Olivia. The way you described her anxiety was perfect! ". . .still use the word neat in this sort of context.. . "
(umm, I do.)
"How on earth has this species propagated itself?" LOL!!!
And again when Yunho went to wipe the water from her bangs "gingerly and nervously"-you used only two words to paint exactly how he reached out to her! It was awesome!
I will say once more-the wonder of this oneshot is how you captured human emotion!!! My enthusiasm for this is ill-expressed in my words, I know. But I mean it, none the less.
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I wish I had time to expand this fic because I'm in love with these Yunho and Olivia characters.
And how peculiar that Jaejoong is the one member missing from this fic!!!!
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sigh.
I noticed that. No Jae. GASP.
I wish you could elaborate on this fic too. The chemistry between Olivia and Yunho hops off the page! I'd love to see more between these two.
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It is so h♥te and I hate you for making me read it ho! ♥♥~
::melts::
and what did you do to Jaejoong!
Oh, and if by any chance you don't know me and probably hate me, I hate you too coz I could count the number of people whose hetfics I have read so far by one hand and now you're in it.
SO, TAG! YOU ARE SO GONNA BE STALK WOMAN
and see you in around, presumably in kage12's 8D
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HAHAHA...yeah, where is he?
Space and TVXQ!!! Who would have thought? Well...someone did...hahaha!
BTW, it hits home because aren't we talking to people now without really meeting them and just using emoticons? Eventually we will become socially inadequate.
Thanks for sharing because I always thought these two can have something great going on if Jaejoong was not in the picture!!!
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