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tiptoetwirl

It's a Long Road (to Walk Alone)

Apr 18, 2011 01:47

Title: It’s a Long Road (to Walk Alone)
Fandom: NCIS
Pairing: None, Gibbs/DiNozzo father/son
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 7,642
Disclaimer: Fanfiction. Look it up.
Summary: Some secrets are worth keeping. Tony finds out he has a daughter and, suddenly, the word ‘family’ takes on a whole different meaning. Spoilers for Cloak, Hiatus, Rule 51, Requiem ( Read more... )

character: mcgee, fiction: fanfic

Comments 20

marie72 April 18 2011, 01:26:09 UTC

More! More! Well done...

tiptoetwirl April 22 2011, 14:24:41 UTC

Hey, sorry I'm so late getting back to you. Thanks a mill, I'm really glad you enjoyed the story!

Hey, Probie! snoopmarymar April 18 2011, 01:52:50 UTC

Excellent work!

Believable characterization, good flow, coherent plot.....

Kudos and Cookies!

:-)

Re: Hey, Probie! tiptoetwirl April 22 2011, 14:26:12 UTC

Hey, sorry I'm so late replying to your wonderful feedback. I'm really glad it worked because Tony and Gibbs are not easy to write. Actually, none of the NCIS characters are! :P

phoenixi77 April 18 2011, 04:18:13 UTC

Good work...loved it :)

(there was a mistake..u wrote 'Tiny' instead of 'Tony')

tiptoetwirl April 22 2011, 14:27:00 UTC

Thanks so much! And thanks for pointing out the typo, I've fixed it :)

titania_torres April 18 2011, 05:36:42 UTC

is there any fandom you can't write love?
this was really good. those boys are hard to get a lock on and you did a really good job. i loved it.

it was a great flow of everything and it all seemed like it could have been an actual episode. everyone was in character.

tiptoetwirl April 22 2011, 14:29:31 UTC

You flatter me. Soz I'm so late getting back to you. I really do try to be prompt but my computer's a relic on the best of days :P

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm trying my hand at original fiction and characterisation is one of the parts I'm struggling with. I figured what better practice than to write Tony and Gibbs and keep them realistic? I think a bit more practice is in order though. Maybe a sequel? :P

singer_s_lament April 18 2011, 14:54:43 UTC

Awesome. I loved dad!Tony protecting his daughter from people he doesn't trust and who obviously do not trust him. It was right for Gibbs to step up and admit he screwed up and was sorry. Is there more?

Good job. :)

tiptoetwirl April 22 2011, 14:30:37 UTC

Thanks for reading and I'm sorry I'm so late getting back to you. I'm working on a sequel but I'm not sure when it'll be ready.