The smell of fresh cut grass hit him first -- probably because his face was buried against the earth, Saito realized, as he moved his neck and felt the grass brush against his cheek. His body felt off, like his legs weren’t quite connected to his torso. Light filtered through his eyelids -- which felt completely wrong.
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I apologize ahead of time for triggers. Saito's not a pleasant character. )
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Yeah. And then readers are going to reach this chapter about 3/4ths of the way into the book and they're gonna go O.O. Sigh.
Thanks for not being all omg my daughter wrote this lolol
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<3
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I aimed really, really hard for making this stand-alone. The "Stories" for each of the Challengers lend themselves to that -- but I still had to explain the mechanics of the Challenge in this piece, too, for those who wouldn't know what they were already (like you would in a novel -- I imagine this chapter's somewhere about 3/4ths into the book).
Thank you. :) I am honestly surprised I got this piece down on paper at all, so I'm glad that the slow reveal of who he was and why he's in Limbo worked. <3
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I definitely prefer that approach to, "My setup, let me exposition it for you in excessive detail." ;)
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Oh my god, you should have seen the original second section I scrapped. That's basically what it was. And I was like hold up, you can place these details in bits and pieces and not all at once, woman *slaps hand.*
This is why I need as much time as possible to write and rewrite for Idol when I'm working, because my brain goes, "OH THIS IS AWESOME," and I start writing, and I realize later upon rereading that it's all expository and boring and bogged down, bleh. lol This is actually why Clarissa was "born," because she originally did not exist when I conceived this idea. She helped me pull back on the exposition and make it more natural. :)
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