Gray Morning Rewrite -- Chapter 4

Mar 06, 2014 11:41

If you're reading Gray Morning for the first time, previous chapters can be found here:
1 | 2 | 3He wasn’t. The next morning, it wasn’t just Savin’s hands that seemed to be off. When Jazz climbed out of bed to attend the first of many meetings that day, Savin struggled to do the same. Savin moved slowly, as if every action caused him some brief ( Read more... )

original fiction, character: mari, trigger: language, the tomorrow trilogy, character: savin, rating: r, pairing: jazz/savin, character: jazz, trigger: medical trauma, novel: gray morning

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alien_writings March 8 2014, 12:41:50 UTC
“You and Jazz aren’t having problems, are you...?”

Is this more foreshadowing-type stuff? Maybe I'm just seeing foreshadowing every-damn-where because I happen to have an idea of the basic plot, lol. But they do have problems (and how!) later, including later in this chapter, kind of. Jazz's getting shot is a problem (though not really a marital problem, heh).

and really, the biggest thing I have to worry about are the tabloids thinking that this is more than what it is

I don't think that's the only thing you have to worry about, Savin....

Yikes, it must have been awful for Savin to find out about that from the news!

(Icon chosen because it seemed like a proper reaction to finding out your husband was shot via television.)

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theun4givables March 8 2014, 14:15:42 UTC
It is foreshadowing type stuff. Knowing the rough plot myself, now, in its entirety helps me with dropping little lines like that, everywhere. lol

Nope, it isn't! But he doesn't know that yet. And yes, I figured having the two be separated when Jazz's (first) injury happens. Because that's how I roll, apparently.

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