Those of you who are members of
writerverse may have already seen this chapter -- but I also mentioned I was iffy about the execution of the second half. Behold! The official version of chapter two -- new and improved, and much more to my liking.
If you're reading Gray Morning for the first time, previous chapter(s) can be found here:
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Is it "like mother, like son" with the hiding-illness deal? That's not going to end well for Savin, is it?
I couldn't help loling a little at Savin's "I'm not suited for leadership" line, just because he was a freaking Emperor in previous drafts.
I sense the seeds of trouble in this chapter. This one also seems a whole lot less random than the first version where Mitchel showed up. I'm sure Mitchel will appear to cause trouble soon enough, though!
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And yes, Hajime definitely prefers her. Even over his own son, apparently, judging by his interaction with her vs his interactions with Savin. Poor Savin bb. I'm not sure where Hajime stands on his bisexuality this time around, though.
Of course it is! He had to get some negative personality traits from his mother. ;)
Yeah, that line amused me, because it's really so true. He never really was suited for leadership, even in previous drafts. lol
Yes, the seeds of trouble had been planted. I'm starting to worry I'm building Mitchel up too much, lol. Because he's really the largest seed of them all.
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