Comments | then_theres_us: (без темы)

jessalrynn in then_theres_us

(Untitled)

Mar 26, 2011 15:39

Beadazzled, Nine/Rose, ADULT
He was about to spontaneously combust and nothing in all the cosmos was going to save him.
4,967 words

A/N: Special thanks to seeing_history for chucking a pencil at me.

( ... )

:jessalrynn, challenge 71

Comments 16

bloose09 March 26 2011, 21:51:58 UTC

Your build up of the Doctor's sexual tension in this story is incredible. I love how you break it with humor and then start building it again:

He was going to haul her back to their room and do absolutely unspeakable things to her. He was going to paint his name on every inch of her skin with his hands and then his lips. He was going to have her screaming for her Doctor before he watched her come undone. He was going to…

…get rescued by shrill laughter and the sound of tinkling glass just past the plant that hid them. Eye contact broke. They both blinked, and then Rose muttered a quick, “sorry,” before darting off.

I really enjoy the fact that there is so much unbridled joy and happiness when Nine/Rose make love with each other:

Rose tried - he could tell she tried - to feign indifference. But then, he leaned over and kissed her shoulder over the mark he'd put there. Her eyes went dreamy and she admitted, "Oh, yeah!" The Doctor grinned and poked her in the side, and she squealed, and the next thing he knew, they were ( ... )

emraldeyedauter March 26 2011, 23:50:36 UTC

Don't know about Nine but I think I might combust. Damn and I just had a shower and everything. I think you may have finally written a piece to rival Tangled up in Blue and you know that's saying something. Well I hope this inspires my Ten/Rose smut that I'm about to sit down a hopefully write.

Damn woman you get better and better.

othermewriter March 27 2011, 04:39:45 UTC

gurgle guhhh - think you boiled me brain!

sapphire_child March 27 2011, 06:19:49 UTC

This was not only unbelievably sexy, it was also so highly strung with Nine's tension that as a reader I felt like I was about to fling myself at the computer screen along with him when he was watching her hunt under the bed. Such a spectacular piece of fiction. Just...wowza!

I will be in my bunk. Hngh.

mutedtempest March 27 2011, 06:40:59 UTC

Guh. Other incoherent things. That is all.