Comments | then_theres_us: Beano Abri (Born Outside) AU Ten/Rose, G

zazie11 in then_theres_us

Beano Abri (Born Outside) AU Ten/Rose, G

Feb 26, 2011 09:54

The autumn leaves - gold, amber, and crimson - made the trees come alive like they were on fire and Rose, standing high above it all, was the match. 5,180 words

A/N: Hello, Everyone! This is my first fic here and I just want to join the other newbies in saying how honored I am to get the chance to write along side all of you! The level of writing ( Read more... )

challenge 68, :zazie11

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zazie11 February 27 2011, 04:28:48 UTC

I plan to throughout this next week, so please watch out for it!

Thank you for reading - glad you like it, so far. :)

lauraxtennant February 27 2011, 00:04:49 UTC

This is so good. I can't wait to read more :)

zazie11 February 27 2011, 04:29:20 UTC

Thank you so much! :D

kilodalton February 27 2011, 01:48:27 UTC

OK so to heck with waiting for my next break --- I WANTED TO READ YOUR FIRST TTU FIC nooooooooooow!!!! =D

I **loved** this.

“It means yes, in my language.”
“Yes what?”
He gently pried away the twig she was worrying from her fingers to take her hand and place it over the word. His touch drew an involuntary sigh from her mouth. Rose quickly bit her bottom lip in an attempt to recover. The newly carved bark was still sharp and cut into her palm. Rose swallowed hard, thinking that maybe this is what love feels like: a scar and a promise, all at once.
“Just yes.” He whispered, his eyes finding hers.

This was so intensely romantic ... and yet so understated. You captured them perfectly!!

It wasn’t even a Tuesday.

OK I officially gulped a little and got misty here ...

the red bicycle leaning against a column on her front porch. His red bicycle.

... but it was all good bc this was unexpected and made me smile =D

I can't wait to read more -- this was excellent, you!! =D

zazie11 February 27 2011, 04:25:38 UTC

My first TTU review from YOU - yay!! My cheeks hurt from the smiling - Thank you for the wonderful review, KD!

It wasn't even a Tuesday. - I'm glad you liked that line - I liked putting that one in. ;)

The red bicycle - that was actually what started me writing this fic. I wanted to do a story that involved the did he or didn't he give Rose the red bike for Christmas when she was twelve- but with a twist. :)

This was so intensely romantic ... and yet so understated. -- I'm so glad you felt that way about this scene. I wanted it to be really romantic, but not cross over the line to icky sweet.

<3

sapphire_child February 27 2011, 04:55:44 UTC

This is so amazing - you've so captured the essence of their relationship even though it's an AU. Classic and beautiful and I can't wait to read the middle section when it's done!

zazie11 February 27 2011, 06:31:56 UTC

Thank you for that!

I haven't written AU before, but I have to say that, as a writing jumping-jacks, it's fantastic. I like the idea of shredding up the bits of canon that suit you and weaving them into new fabric.

I'm going to work on the missing piece throughout this week - I have a lot I want to cram in there. :D

mutedtempest February 27 2011, 07:29:52 UTC

Oh man, this is gorgeous! You've written them perfectly, and all the familiar little elements are blended in perfectly. It's like a tapestry full of color where you notice new little threads every time you look.

I just adore this and would LOVE to see it continued. I had a little trepidation at first since I'm not usually fond of things that are quite so AU, but but this just...gah. Gonna have to read it again a few times to really take it all in.

maybe this is what love feels like: a scar and a promise, all at once. You know, I never knew how to describe love before, but I'm pretty sure I'll never get any closer than this.

Welcome from a fellow newbie!

zazie11 February 27 2011, 16:48:44 UTC

It's like a tapestry full of color where you notice new little threads every time you look.

Thank you! I've never written AU before, but I think that this is the most fun aspect to it. It's like a nudge with your elbow to a fellow "insider." The reader has to know the line/scene you're riffing to see the double meaning there ... but you still have to write it so that it can also work strictly in the AU space you're creating. It can be a more obvious trick, like using a familiar speech pattern for a character, or you can make it much more subtle, so that you really have to know the canon well to not miss it. The latter is what made writing this piece interesting to me, personally. I would love to hear a line you caught and liked! :)

I understand your trepidation with AU stories. I think that Rose would love the Doctor in any regeneration, anywhere and anywhen., and vice versa for him. I really can't imagine a universe in which they wouldn't work because what works is on that raw/intangible/most basic level. Cardial AC/DC! I think ( ... )