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Oct 16, 2010 17:22

Book of Days
Rose/Doctor, Teen
This is the beginning of love, curled and sleeping within their breasts. They can be the home it will make for itself, for forever.

First, they will have to rebuild the places where it lives.,
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:jessalrynn, challenge 53

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psyfi_geekgirl October 16 2010, 21:50:54 UTC

Brilliant. Stone cold brilliant.
Mickrick, Silurians, River, BadWolf, his name, the Brig, Sontarans, that she starts to smell and taste things like him, two car crashes, that she/Jack/Doctor are fixed points in time--ALL OF IT: Fucking Awesome!

she will be ruled by neither it nor its Lord...
*gets chills*
*tips hat, thumbs up*

jessalrynn October 21 2010, 16:49:52 UTC

Thank you so very much. I liked the idea of a world where the Silurians stayed awake and humans didn't happen. :-) As to the car crashes, I'd noticed the eerie parallel there but I'd never had a chance to emphasize it before. I'm so glad you liked it. :-D

othermewriter October 16 2010, 23:39:35 UTC

You never cease to amaze me how you can say so very much with so very few words. As usual BRILLIANT, even if it isn't your usual style.

jessalrynn October 21 2010, 16:51:02 UTC

*smiles* Well, the ideas for the fic popped into my head in drabblets and snippets and single sentence zingers, and it just occurred to me that I could put them all into a fic for someone who is bouncing around a lot. :-) Thank you.

thenakedcupcake October 17 2010, 00:13:32 UTC

Oh, my. Just oh.

Wow. This is fanfreakingtastic.

jessalrynn October 21 2010, 16:51:18 UTC

Thank you so much! :-D

missnyah October 17 2010, 01:05:39 UTC

Settle in. This is going to take a while. maybe you should know up front that this might be my favorite thing you've written.

It isn't the Doctor's secret wish. He had two dreams, so utterly inseparable in his mind that one moment's miracle brings the pair true at once, thereby negating both of them.

I love the push and pull here, two dreams tied together and once they've come true he doesn't even have dreams anymore.

He can't save relationships or himself, but anything physically bigger than a breadbox, that's got real potential.

I'm in love with the quiet, wry humor that crops up. :)

The weight of her steps upon the Earth pulls distant stars from the sky to testify. It is time for her to go.

This might have been when I fell in love. In my mind, Rose was so unremittingly changed by Bad Wolf. I love the way she's woven into time and space here.

One of the Doctor's greatest strengths is in lying convincingly to himself. Another is that he's highly contagious.This put me immediately in mind of Eleven and how the wprst thing ( ... )

jessalrynn October 21 2010, 17:05:12 UTC

Thank you. *hugs* I consider it a special occasion when I get a nice long special review like this, so thanks so much ( ... )

stillbrainfried October 17 2010, 10:54:20 UTC

I absolutely love this.

The last few lines broke my heart...
(although I have to admit that I cracked up at 'King Alistair the Great' - you know me: I'm probably insane ;))

jessalrynn October 21 2010, 17:06:16 UTC

*grins* I knew you'd spot him. Did you find the other?

Thanks so much!

stillbrainfried October 21 2010, 17:47:13 UTC

Hmmm, not sure what to make of the boy in the pyjamas (or am I completely wrong?)