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Aug 28, 2010 20:41

Dappled, and Drowsy, and Ready for Sleep, Nine/Rose, Teen

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challenge 48, :housemaid79

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housemaid79 August 30 2010, 06:50:17 UTC
Thank you! (I was actually really nervous about posting this piece, so your comment - the first, and such a positive one - calmed my nerves considerably)

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eskridge77 August 29 2010, 01:38:45 UTC
Oh, my God... the imagery...

I mean, the sweet romance of it, yeah. The dead on characterizations, certainly. But the imagery!

Rose makes silly toasts with the hand-pressed grape juice they drink from canning jars. Watches sunlight stream through, turning them amethyst.

She traces absent-minded hearts in the sand.

Spooned up behind her, his face half-obscured in the ink of three a.m. ...

That last one... wow...

Beautifully done!

(Oh, and "The 59th Street Bridge Song" ftw!) :D

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housemaid79 August 30 2010, 06:52:10 UTC
Thank you! You've picked some of my own favorite lines.

*and how much do I love that caught the song reference?!?! :)

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eskridge77 August 30 2010, 11:23:54 UTC
Well, I'm old enough to remember it... *lol*

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develish1 August 29 2010, 01:47:07 UTC
beautiful, just beautiful.

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housemaid79 August 30 2010, 06:47:30 UTC
Thank you! :)

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amberfocus August 29 2010, 01:52:02 UTC
Oh, what a perfect Nine/Rose love story. You've improved my day, oh, 80% with this fic.

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housemaid79 August 30 2010, 06:53:35 UTC
Thank you! I am more than pleased to have my fic be of service. :)

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professor_spork August 29 2010, 02:38:34 UTC
Oh god, I *love* this. I love this so much. This is such a... a YOU story. I often click on TTU stories without glancing first at their authors (or at their Doctors, which have made for some very interesting mis-reads xD) but your voice is really strong throughout this. I could tell it was you because you have the same flawless grasp of the hesitant, blossoming but powerful connection between Rose and Nine that you exhibited in Push-Pull. I might even love this one more. NEVER STOP WRITING THEM, because you just *get it.*

These certainly aren't ALL of my favorite moments, but here's a few:

“I’ve never really been one to try an’ record everything.” She traces absent-minded hearts in the sand. “Used to bug Shireen, no end…we’d be at a concert, and she’d want me to take pictures the whole time…couldn’t just enjoy the moment. Never understood it.”

Oh, that's so Rose. And also so *real.* A touch of normality that really grounds the piece.

He half-wakes, and one arm snakes out across white sheeting to ask a question ( ... )

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housemaid79 August 30 2010, 08:17:38 UTC
Your commment absolutely made my day! Seriously, I read it, and was like, "I have a writer's 'voice' - hurray!!!!" (That's one of those things I'm never certain on, you know? Because, how do you to tell with your own stuff?) Really, I just kind of want to hug this comment...

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