This is really gorgeous. I love how Mark still has this sense of unease toward what Eduardo has done and telling him to go away, while how Eduardo has just completely liberated himself from everything.
Thank you! I was trying to show Mark go through phases of coping (or rather not), first with the incomprehension and need to make sense of what happened, then the interlude of his understandable freakout of being faced with a not dead, non-human Eduardo, and following that anger. Eduardo on the other hand has adopted that very coping mechanism that Mark himself has always taken refuge in during at least since Harvard by retreating into his own world where he is in control oh things and removed from hurt and rejection.
I did promise my beta I'd fix it. Might bea while though.
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it!
This was a really gorgeous read, painful too. The way Edaurdo felt half there, half somewhere else was captured so deftly, and the hole he left felt so real. Eduardo's liberation came with a price. He might have only been partly there on land, but he had a whole life and leaving it, even if he did want he wanted/needed to do, wasn't done without causing hurt. Fab work.
Thank you! I tried to have Eduardo not quite belong or at least feel that way, especially once he loses a big part of his social net and support, which I think works well with his canon issues of trying to please everyone and letting himself be pulled apart but being unable to take a stand, decide what he himself wants and commit to it, insert himself properly. But of course he did have a life that touched other people, and where it was easy for him and for them to rationalise his absence resp. withdrawal post-dilution there's a difference between not being around/with/there for someone, and not being at all.
I absolutely adored this fic - love mer...err, people stories and this was absolutely beautiful. Definitely agree with what has been said already - Eduardo really felt disconnected for a lot of the story and it was just so *painful* to read at times - but that didn't stop me from quickly wanting to read more. And I feel so sorry for Chris and Dustin :(
Thank you! I juggled a bit with the difference levels pre- and post-dilution, the complete disconnect once he has changed, and the comparison to Mark's habit of withdrawing into his own world by wiring in, and I'm glad it seems to have worked so well.
I did promise my beta a fixit sequelat some point, but it might take a while. :)
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it.
Stunning fic! There's a hypnotic quality to this story, a very fluid feel to the writing that works wonderfully with the emphasis on the ocean and its draw for Eduardo. I ended up feeling glad that Eduardo could "go home," then feeling angry at him for causing such pain to his family and Dustin, Chris, and Mark. You did a great job showing both perspectives.
(I would dearly love to see how you could fix them, but the story also ends on a great--if painful--note on its own. Kudos!)
Thank you! I tried to show the lure the sea has for Eduardo, his own garden of Eden where nothing hurt and everything was good that he was pulled out but could ultimately return to once he found the courage to go (or didn't feel he'd be leaving anything behind). And, well, I think TSN is the perfect fandom for stories in which it's hard to pinpoint who is/does right and who wrong, just as in the movie. Everybody has reasons for what they are doing, and most of the time they are even good reasons. It's the POV that paints our good and bad guys.
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it!
Comments 15
here's hoping for a sequel.. ?
Reply
I did promise my beta I'd fix it. Might bea while though.
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it!
Reply
Reply
Reply
I, too, would love to see a sequel!
Reply
I did promise my beta a fixit sequelat some point, but it might take a while. :)
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it.
Reply
Reply
Reply
(I would dearly love to see how you could fix them, but the story also ends on a great--if painful--note on its own. Kudos!)
Reply
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, I'm glad you liked it!
Reply
Leave a comment