It's kind of hard to organize what I have to say about each of them because I read them in order and didn't stop to write a comment between stories about each one. So I'll just tell you how much I LOVE these. Most of all, the second one is amazing. It just shows this awesome transition from acquaintances to lovers (though not graphic) without making it too difficult. Like, y'know, it was a smooth and simple relationship from the get-go.
So, yeah. I feel like an idiot for not saying anything remotely substantial, but there you are! Awesome!
i appreciate any comments :D and i did kind of throw a lot at you at once.
i'm glad you enjoyed them, i've been writing a *ton* lately, and a lot of it's been kind of fluffy to get my mind off the way the season's going for these boys...
these are all great moments, acutely captured, fireflies in a jar.
i especially like the conceit in the last one, troy trying to channel things but really not being able to, and matt seeing right through it. there's such a palpable sweetness to it. love the concrete detail of this line: He opens his mouth to speak, but Matt's leaning forward, both of those big, warm hands on either side of Troy's face, and that smile, it takes [should be 'tastes' right?] like salt from sunflower seeds and orange Gatorade.; it's perfect for letting the reader roll around in the contrasts of the scene, salty and sweet and just right
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for the record, i adore responses like this! what with the length and the content and the *squee*! so, thank you for that. and yes, in that last one, it is supposed to be "tastes" i caught it too late and forgot to fix it after i'd posted here.
thank you so much for reading! i'm so glad you liked them!
//Troy laughs it off, but dreams of it that night.//
I really like that. Just a little line that shows so well how small, seemingly thoughtless things make such a big impact, and how they can be interpreted in so many different ways. :-)
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It's kind of hard to organize what I have to say about each of them because I read them in order and didn't stop to write a comment between stories about each one. So I'll just tell you how much I LOVE these. Most of all, the second one is amazing. It just shows this awesome transition from acquaintances to lovers (though not graphic) without making it too difficult. Like, y'know, it was a smooth and simple relationship from the get-go.
So, yeah. I feel like an idiot for not saying anything remotely substantial, but there you are! Awesome!
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i'm glad you enjoyed them, i've been writing a *ton* lately, and a lot of it's been kind of fluffy to get my mind off the way the season's going for these boys...
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i especially like the conceit in the last one, troy trying to channel things but really not being able to, and matt seeing right through it. there's such a palpable sweetness to it. love the concrete detail of this line: He opens his mouth to speak, but Matt's leaning forward, both of those big, warm hands on either side of Troy's face, and that smile, it takes [should be 'tastes' right?] like salt from sunflower seeds and orange Gatorade.; it's perfect for letting the reader roll around in the contrasts of the scene, salty and sweet and just right ( ... )
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thank you so much for reading! i'm so glad you liked them!
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I really like that. Just a little line that shows so well how small, seemingly thoughtless things make such a big impact, and how they can be interpreted in so many different ways. :-)
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