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HHF ENTRY: Into the Haze, Part 1
HORRIFYING HALLOWEEN FIC ENTRY
Title: Into the Haze
Author: ciwey
Rating: NC-17 for excessive swearing and depiction of violence
Summary: A night at the Gamma Rho Fraternity House turns out to be hell.
Disclaimer: This never happened.
Author’s Notes: Angsty College!Mavid. Based on the Cold Case episode "The Promise". Comments and constructive ( Read more... )
Title: Into the Haze
Author: ciwey
Rating: NC-17 for excessive swearing and depiction of violence
Summary: A night at the Gamma Rho Fraternity House turns out to be hell.
Disclaimer: This never happened.
Author’s Notes: Angsty College!Mavid. Based on the Cold Case episode "The Promise". Comments and constructive ( Read more... )
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onto part 2
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“You,” Hunter said in as cold a tone as he could muster, pointing a finger straight at the Australian (what was his name? Max? Mick? Mike?) almost accusatorily. “Come up here and take a seat.”
This whole scene is almost straight out of the episode, though that's more of a compliment to you than anything. Showing Hunter's thought process while out to demean his pledges, while also displaying Michael's fear works very well off of each other.
Though the more obvious replacement of Laurie as David is slightly disturbing. :\
Me and Neil and Andy, we’re going together, so... you want to come with? Old time’s sake?
*Neal. For shame, Ciw.
“Dave, where in the hell are you?” Michael asked ( ... )
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Oh, wow, thanks. I really spent a lot of time on that scene compared to the rest of the fic, and I'm glad that showed. :D
This whole scene is almost straight out of the episode...
Yeah. Like I said below, in retrospect I'd have it be band practice instead of film club. :/
Though the more obvious replacement of Laurie as David is slightly disturbing. :\
Well. They're both fat. Sort of. x)
*Neal. For shame, Ciw.
OH SHI-
I've always loved the mental imagery here. I can definitely see how this would look if Haze were acted out.
Mmm. That was my favourite line in that scene too. :)
Things become amiss quite a lot in Haze, don't they? x)
DON'T JUDGE ME AND MY WORD USE. D:<
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When David showed up, I cringed for real. I was like RUN. RUN FAR AWAY. And then I was like, NO! YOU LOVE FILM CLUB! And then in a quieter voice, That's where I was on the weekends. Haha, not really. *shifty eyes*
I applaud your use of the word 'helluva'. :) I don't use it enough!
The house was warm, warmer than he had expected it to be, but the humidity of the room, that was the real killer.
zomg fire foreshadowing
also love the word 'hapless'
“Dave, where in the hell are you?” Michael asked again softly, suddenly feeling so very alone amidst the uncaring crowd.
AWWWWWWWWW
while he’s off scr-
While he's off what? Scratching his balls? Scrimshawing? Screwing Dave's clone?! I MUST KNOW.
A hand grasped David firmly by the shoulder, halting him midway through the dancing crowd. Turning around with perhaps more guardedness than the situation warranted, he looked up in time to find the fierce, intense gaze of Nick Hunter. He bit back a yelp.PUNCH THAT SLUT IN ( ... )
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Sweet. That was probably the one scene I spent most time on by proportion. :D
And then I was like, NO! YOU LOVE FILM CLUB!
In retrospect I probably would have had Dave ask Mike to band practice instead, but there were only a couple hours left until the deadline when I was writing that scene, and as it was I chose to lift the scene directly from the episode instead.
While he's off what? Scratching his balls? Scrimshawing? Screwing Dave's clone?! I MUST KNOW.
The original intention was "screwing Stacey". x)
"make that one of the BOYS and you got a deal, partner!"
WTF, slut Dave, wrong story. Go back to one of Mena's RPs.
the whole exchange between nick and dave was like a perverted old pedo luring a little boy into his car with candy :( PO' DAVERS!
I take you to the candy shop,
I'll let you lick the lollipop,
Give head Dave, don't you stop,
Keep going 'til you hit the spot.
omg KARA?!
Rofflemaow. Kara is omnipresent now, is she? ;)
Somebody please just hit the ( ... )
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