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HHF ENTRY: Into the Haze, Part 1
HORRIFYING HALLOWEEN FIC ENTRY
Title: Into the Haze
Author: ciwey
Rating: NC-17 for excessive swearing and depiction of violence
Summary: A night at the Gamma Rho Fraternity House turns out to be hell.
Disclaimer: This never happened.
Author’s Notes: Angsty College!Mavid. Based on the Cold Case episode "The Promise". Comments and constructive ( Read more... )
Title: Into the Haze
Author: ciwey
Rating: NC-17 for excessive swearing and depiction of violence
Summary: A night at the Gamma Rho Fraternity House turns out to be hell.
Disclaimer: This never happened.
Author’s Notes: Angsty College!Mavid. Based on the Cold Case episode "The Promise". Comments and constructive ( Read more... )
“You,” Hunter said in as cold a tone as he could muster, pointing a finger straight at the Australian (what was his name? Max? Mick? Mike?) almost accusatorily. “Come up here and take a seat.”
This whole scene is almost straight out of the episode, though that's more of a compliment to you than anything. Showing Hunter's thought process while out to demean his pledges, while also displaying Michael's fear works very well off of each other.
Though the more obvious replacement of Laurie as David is slightly disturbing. :\
Me and Neil and Andy, we’re going together, so... you want to come with? Old time’s sake?
*Neal. For shame, Ciw.
“Dave, where in the hell are you?” Michael asked again softly, suddenly feeling so very alone amidst the uncaring crowd.
I've always loved the mental imagery here. I can definitely see how this would look if Haze were acted out.
“You know, David. I really like guys like you. I really do.”
DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD: SCARY-EPIC.
Coming to a fearful realization that something was very much amiss...
Things become amiss quite a lot in Haze, don't they? x)
AHHHHHHHH THE ENTIRE HUMILIATION SCENE WAS A TOTAL CRINGE-FEST. AH. D:
Even though I really want to find out how you resolved this, I'm not too sure when I'll get to it...but you can expect another comment within the next 72 hours. :D
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Oh, wow, thanks. I really spent a lot of time on that scene compared to the rest of the fic, and I'm glad that showed. :D
This whole scene is almost straight out of the episode...
Yeah. Like I said below, in retrospect I'd have it be band practice instead of film club. :/
Though the more obvious replacement of Laurie as David is slightly disturbing. :\
Well. They're both fat. Sort of. x)
*Neal. For shame, Ciw.
OH SHI-
I've always loved the mental imagery here. I can definitely see how this would look if Haze were acted out.
Mmm. That was my favourite line in that scene too. :)
Things become amiss quite a lot in Haze, don't they? x)
DON'T JUDGE ME AND MY WORD USE. D:<
AHHHHHHHH THE ENTIRE HUMILIATION SCENE WAS A TOTAL CRINGE-FEST. AH. D:
The scene really developed into more than I ever thought it would be. I think it's mostly because I started working on the later scenes first, and, well, Hunter's character turned out to be sicker than I thought.
Even though I really want to find out how you resolved this, I'm not too sure when I'll get to it...but you can expect another comment within the next 72 hours. :D
Sweeeeeeet. I love your comments. :D
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