RP Character Story - Lovely Moments Before It Happened

[terr1412]

Location: Inside a room, in Barma Main Mansion.
Description: An excerpt from Noa Nerezza Barma's past. When her mother is still alive and their family is well.
Fandom: Inside curious_rp I guess? x)

This, is a little fic I've kept in my documents over few months, ever since someone posted in the Curious? Forum about the chapters title if your own character has

Comments

[biruemel]

Tehe~ Noa's so adorable~~~ Wanting to be like her parents is so cute!!

Your grammer is fine Terr ^^
The only thing i can say is that, in the begining, in the phrase " since both her parents are busy in their work" i would change "in" to "with" and "fight the chains" I would write "fighting the chains" but those are more of personal preference alterations ^^

[terr1412]

Ehehe, thank you!

Ahh, after I read it again, I think the story is better with those personal preferences of yours. :) I can't edit them now because I'm mobile now, but thank you very much for your suggestion :D

[terr1412]

Ahaha, you can read what happened to Noa on her bio, y'know~ x)
and yes, her mother's okay with it. If her daughter wants to, then okay. She's a easy-going mother >.> she knows her daughter well x)

[hoshinautau]

Inspired by my fic?! I'm so honoured. (*≧▽≦)
Anyways, your story is quite adorable in itself. Noa was such a cute girl, admiring her parents like that.
Good to know that there are RP characters that have nice parents. XD

Oh, and maybe change
"The daughter blushed as she dive her head in embarrassment." to "The daughter blushed as she dived her head in embarassment." ^^;

[terr1412]

Ehehe~ ohyeah, they are pretty rare than other parents since that you pointed it out xD

changed the words into the correct words! thank you Chiisai! :D