Fic- Fighter

[tasha_elizabeth]

Title: Fighter

He’s outside. He’s walking through the parking lot on a beautiful fall morning when, suddenly, the world falls away. Everything goes white. Pure, aching, blinding white.

He swims in the white a moment as it fades. Fades to grey. Fades to black.

And then he hears the loudest noise he’s ever heard.

Comments

[petrichor_fizz]

I LOVE THIS.

This is one of my favourite scenarios - survivors having to make do in the wake of a horrific event. I loved the development of the relationship between them, and the fact that it was important to the plot, but it wasn't the focus of the story.

Personally, the "and then he woke up" ending doesn't bother me, although it usually would, because I find Wilson's hallucination (or whatever) interesting in terms of what it says about him and House. But I can see how some people wouldn't like it. However, it's your story, and how you end it is your business, and I liked it, so there it is.

Anyway, where have you been? You need to write more. Don't make me hurt you.

[recrudescence]

I hate you so hard right now.

In a highly complimentary way, I mean. I don't know how you sketch everything out so fully while still being concise, but it works, and it works very well. This stood out especially: Wilson not being able to remember anything from before aside from House treating him like shit. That and Wilson noticing that, regardless of how everything else changes, House still looks the same. My God.

So much hate.

[alex51324]

I really liked this. I have very mixed feelings about apocafic, so the "and then he woke up" works for me. It also means that you then have to go back and think about why Wilson dreamed what he did. Why is he only "vaguely useful"? Realistically, it seems like an oncologist would be near the top of the list after an atomic explosion. Why is House "everyone else"? Again, if the dream were real, *any* kind of doctor would almost have to count as useful. Why does the Army round up victims and put them in camps, instead of using the perfectly readilly available hospital? And, perhaps most importantly, why does the dog have three legs? The "waking up" scene makes clear that we have to interpret these things as aspects of Wilson's psyche, rather than as "real" (fictional) events. So yeah, I think it works.

[tasha_elizabeth]

Wow, thank you. This means a lot to me. I just stumbled across your writing the other day and I've been trying to summon up the courage to comment on it. I'm so pleased you liked this!

[thinlysliced]

I like this a lot. You have a very clear writing style, which I love, but it's still really evocative. I'm not normally a fan of the 'and then he woke up' scenario, but the way you write it it works incredibly well and just adds to the preceding story, because you can then go back and reinterpret it in light of its being a dream.

It's actually really impressive that you haven't just made what's normally just a plot cliché bearable, but have gone and turned it into a clever way of examining Wilson's character. I'm memming this.

[evila_elf]

o.o Wow.
Kinda speechless after realizing it was all a dream and...wow.

*adds to memories*