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World Shaking Down (Part 1/?)

May 12, 2011 02:42

Title: World Shaking Down (Part 1/?)
Author: talesofyesac
Fandom: Merlin
Rating: PG-13
Characters/Pairing: Merlin, Arthur (gen)
Word Count: 4,498
Warnings: Some violence and eventual character death (minor character). Also, spoilers for 2x13 and anything before that.
Summary: You can't save the dying with words... and, yet, Balinor is still breathing. ( Read more... )

fandom: merlin, fiction: world shaking down

Comments 13

archaeologist_d May 12 2011, 21:43:03 UTC

I liked how Arthur was trying to kill him and then realizing that he couldn't, that it was Merlin after all and he just couldn't. Well done.

talesofyesac May 14 2011, 05:26:26 UTC

I couldn't really envision any other reaction (at least not well enough to write it plausibly). If Arthur just killed Merlin straight off, that wouldn't, in my opinion, be in keeping with his character. On the other hand, there are enough times that he's let Merlin get arrested, sacked him, etc. that I can't see him simply trusting Merlin, no questions asked, either. It's an interesting topic. Anyway, thanks very much for reading and taking the time to comment! As a new author, it means a lot! :)

bramble_rose May 12 2011, 21:45:01 UTC

This is EXCELLENT, showing Arthur (while slowly suffocating Merlin) thinking his way through what he's doing and his relationship with Merlin and his different options. The descriptions are so vivid and like I'm right there, feeling it right along with them. Like the Arthur pov, and I'm really looking forward to more!!! (So, Balinor is still alive right now, yes?)

talesofyesac May 14 2011, 05:29:56 UTC

Thanks so much! After finishing a day of three college finals, reading such kind words gives me a reason to smile (again, three college finals--I so, so need reasons to smile, possibly as much as I need sleep...).

rocketgirl2 May 13 2011, 00:53:25 UTC

You've caught the dynamic between the boys so well in this piece! I also love the depth you manage to give Arthur in such a short fic. Great job!

talesofyesac May 14 2011, 05:31:01 UTC

I'm very glad you think so! The dynamic between these two characters is what really draws me to the show--it's wonderful to hear that you think I'm doing that relationship justice.

mara93 May 13 2011, 05:36:39 UTC

You write these two amazingly! All of your detail made me feel right there. I loved Arthur's thoughts and his battle, both physical and mental with Merlin. It's truly what makes these two so potent to watch.

Well done and looking forward to more!

talesofyesac May 14 2011, 05:32:11 UTC

It's truly what makes these two so potent to watch.

Oh, I so agree! They've got a complicated relationship, these two. Lots of layers. It's good fun to play around with.

iichristinll May 13 2011, 18:40:23 UTC

Oooh. Eerie to think of Merlin handing Arthur all the power to control him with. This is a great start to what promises to be an intense read. Really looking forward to seeing where it goes.

talesofyesac May 14 2011, 05:37:21 UTC

I was really interested in how things might play out if Merlin didn't have magic as the ultimate trump card. Before, Arthur might have been his prince, but he could never technically force Merlin to do anything if Merlin truly refused. Now, though, he's actually got to listen to him whether he wants to or not, and I don't think Merlin (at least the way I'm trying to write him) has considered exactly what the implications of that could be. Anyhow, thanks for taking the time to comment! It's very appreciated! :)