Comments | szaleniec1000: Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 4

szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 4

Jul 06, 2014 22:25

The previous chapter ended with an outburst of disembodied dialogue claiming that something or someone unknown was attacking "those girls", who could have been the main cast but could just as easily have been random bystanders. Now for the "resolution". Yes, it's bad.

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 4 )

show don't tell, missed the point of voldemort, honourable member, did not do the bloody research, om nom nom, ron is ooc, symbolic flight, draco is ooc, the nudist doth protest too much, pov!fail, the cake is a lie, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, creepiest toddler ever, tractum ex culo, hermione in name only, breast fixation, anticlimax, soapbox, separated by a common language, bad sex, a description would be nice, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, department of redundancy department, conflict be damned, goose of doom, completely nonsexual, thirty contrivance pileup, i can has characterisation, statute schmatute, sexism, disembodied dialogue, harry potter, dialogue is not narration, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, i blame the parents

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fly_buggy_fly July 6 2014, 22:14:58 UTC

I love that Ron's going "placid" rather than "flaccid".

Because he's such a docile creature, yes?

szaleniec1000 July 6 2014, 22:28:53 UTC

Four betas!

zelda_queen July 6 2014, 23:35:35 UTC

Fun fact time! Did you know that TV tropes has a Useful Notes page for Nudism? I was reading through it and found this little gem ( ... )

duster July 8 2014, 01:16:28 UTC

With what little I can remember of the Harry Potter series, I'm pretty sure Ron's junk would not be on the list of topics Draco would discuss.

Comment for the last chapter as well; have you ever done a ctrl+f search for the word "breasts" for this fic and counted the results? I'm pretty sure this fic talks about boobs more than the Japanese porn games I riff.

szaleniec1000 July 8 2014, 09:07:34 UTC

77 instances of "breast(s)" in all contexts in Exposed, 82 in Too Exposed and 126 in Overexposed, apparently. It doesn't include synonyms, but the author doesn't tend to use them for breasts.

duster July 8 2014, 16:20:02 UTC

I love how it double between the last two. You know that's when Niel just gave up all pretenses and went whole hog pervert.

szaleniec1000 July 8 2014, 17:14:22 UTC

If I was being charitable, I'd attribute the jump to the introduction of a baby who needs to be breastfed. But even so, there's no need to talk about them that much.

undying_embers July 8 2014, 02:18:56 UTC

Resurrecting long-dead dark lords is "anserine", apparently. I can only assume the author meant asinine, which is something I'd associate less with putting the future of the world in peril and more with hiking through the jungle with no clothes on.

That and writing Hogwarts Exposed.

sickbritkid2 July 14 2014, 09:53:45 UTC

The owls had initially gone unobserved as they drew near the ship and circled it predatorily, looking for the recipients of the mail they carried. When they dived as one toward the pool, however, with their wings extended to their full width, they were unquestionably noticed.

Or just the post. That was worthy of a cliffhanger, I don't think.

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