Comments | szaleniec1000: Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 16

szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 16

Mar 15, 2013 23:20

Fair warning: this update is nasty even by Hogwarts Exposed standards. The author himself saw fit to put a disclaimer on there, and given how averse he normally is to warnings and content tags (contrast these summaries with Deserving's laundry list) that should tell you something.
( Apologies for the delay. Again. )

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Comments 64

zelda_queen March 15 2013, 23:52:16 UTC

"Yes, apparently he can't decide whether he's using Muggle methods (which I'm no expert on but I don't think involve knives) or magic."

If he's using Muggle methods, certainly not. Given how she only seems to be a month or two along, at the crudest, there's the coat hanger method. There are also medicines and herbs that can induce miscarriages, which were used even in the Days of Yore (example: the second season of the revival of Upstairs Downstairs). Of course, there's also modern medical technology that I'm almost positive doesn't involve opening the girl up at all, but this is Hogwarts Exposed. There's no way Neil would use something as convenient as THAT.

Incidentally, did you read the excuse he gave in his Yahoo Group, as to why it was so ridiculously hard for Amanda to get an abortion?

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 00:11:28 UTC

Abortion is illegal in the wizarding world (which is about the only part of this subplot that makes any kind of sense, considering their low population and obsession with carrying on their pureblood lineages) and she can't go to a Muggle town and get it done on the NHS because... why can't she go to a Muggle town? Dick the dick managed it in Exposed 23, but then Exposed 23 might as well not have happened for all the effect it's had on the plot. About the only lasting consequence was the concealment charm, which Hermione said she was considering teaching them anyway.

sickbritkid2 March 17 2013, 21:02:09 UTC

Abortion is illegal in the wizarding world

It makes a bit of sense when you consider the "100% effective contraceptive potion" that Hermione was irresponsible enough to not use before her capture in Hogwarts Exposed...

fly_buggy_fly March 16 2013, 00:10:48 UTC

...Wait, is he raping her after he just gave her a D&C?

but by the time I was out of the stands they had already put you is stasis

LOL "stasis" only makes me think of robots -- It's the Transformer term for unconscious bots.

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 00:31:24 UTC

It's too much of a sci-fi term to have a place in any Potterfic that's not a radical AU. I don't watch Transformers, but I'm used to it in the context of ultra-tech suspended animation techniques, such as for passengers on spacecraft.

fly_buggy_fly March 16 2013, 00:34:25 UTC

I don't understand why this stupid story didn't just use the word "unconscious."

Oh. Right. Because it's a stupid story u_u

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 02:08:22 UTC

And because the author is a pretentious arsebiscuit. See also: "balance".

Thread 6

duster March 16 2013, 04:45:52 UTC

This chapter combined with the next one is so fucking depraved I have no idea why any of the betas didn't actively try to stop him from writing this.

So many levels of messed up. So so many. I'm too tired to eloquently describe all the bad feels.

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 11:15:48 UTC

Especially considering that apparently there are things the betas dissuaded him from. What must these have been like? It doesn't bear thinking about, does it?

duster March 16 2013, 15:28:45 UTC

My brain just bluescreened from the mere concept there were things so terrible even by HE standards they had to be removed.

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 15:39:49 UTC

I agree, especially as this was mentioned in relation to the kidnapping/torture subplot from the first HE.

warlock_female March 16 2013, 06:41:05 UTC

Well I for one am sooo glad that we are showing that girls that DARE to get knocked up and have abortions will also get raped.

I also love all the sound effects that evil abortion leading witch makes. That was the only part of this story I could enjoy, though now I have to go scoop out my brain.

szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 11:31:28 UTC

I also love all the sound effects that evil abortion leading witch makes.

She reminds me of the "young crone" who takes Blackadder to see the wise woman in "Bells", so I had immense difficulty taking her scene seriously. The cackling and hooting was just the icing on the cake.

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szaleniec1000 March 16 2013, 11:36:06 UTC

The author seems to be a fan of Dirty Dancing (remember them randomly watching it at Casa Zacherley in the first fic?) though how it escaped his notice that it's set forty years before his own story I don't know. The threat of being kicked out of school for getting pregnant would also fit the '60s (or hell, even the '80s) better than the '00s. I'm guessing it's a fanon extrapolation from how old-fashioned the wizarding world seems to be in the books, but it hasn't been established at all convincingly.

sickbritkid2 March 17 2013, 12:24:49 UTC

I'm guessing it's a fanon extrapolation from how old-fashioned the wizarding world seems to be in the books, but it hasn't been established at all convincingly.

The wizarding world never struck me as THAT kind of old-fashioned in the books, though.

szaleniec1000 March 17 2013, 16:12:17 UTC

Exactly, which is why it doesn't work. It's a hasty generalisation based, like so much of what passes for worldbuilding to Neil, on a whole raft of unstated assumptions.