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szaleniec1000

In This World and the Next Chapter 5

Nov 12, 2012 15:10

Well, here I am after a longer-than-anticipated break. I chose ITWATN to review because of a recommendation in the comments here, and an initial skim read told me it was bad. This impression turned out to be wrong. It's not just bad, but reaches depths of irredeemable dreadfulness to rival Hogwarts Exposed. At least that had a serviceable (if ( Read more... )

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sickbritkid2 November 13 2012, 03:21:13 UTC

Even leaving aside the fact that his mother was hexed whilst totally unarmed, which is all the author apparently thinks Hermione is good for.

Yes, but Molly is an eeeevil Weasley, so obviously being hexed while unarmed doesn't matter for dick because of her disgusting blood-traitor heritage!

sickbritkid2 November 13 2012, 03:22:11 UTC

Off-topic aside: Love Eric Idle with the Brian May hairdo...

sickbritkid2 November 13 2012, 03:24:36 UTC

"The Potter boy is pressing charges against you, we'll lose over half the gold in fines."

...WHAT!?

WHAT FUCKING GOLD!? Did this insensitive dickweed forget just have goddamn POOR the Weasleys are!? Robst, you fucking piece of shit!

So Harry's going to kick the Weasleys while they're down and essentially sue them for some paltry, shite amount of gold that will be utterly inconsequential to the fact that he has a fucking FORTUNE at the age of eleven!

szaleniec1000 January 27 2013, 21:05:23 UTC

Just wait until they knock down the Burrow for no fucking reason whatsoever next chapter. (Which is imminent, by the way. I'm mostly done and hoping to get it posted tonight.)

Trotsky Meets the Minister sith_droideka November 13 2012, 03:24:50 UTC

Leon Trotsky, former dark wizard, was meeting with yet another of his "operatives" in his global struggle against Stalin (and capitalism, and socialism, and fascism, and etc...). His agent, a British man in a bowler hat and pinstriped suit, was fidgeting at his desk, occasionally dabbing at his face with a handkerchief ( ... )

Re: Trotsky Meets the Minister szaleniec1000 November 13 2012, 04:00:34 UTC

As ever, nicely done. I know I've said this before, but you've got a very interesting ficverse there. :)

sickbritkid2 November 13 2012, 03:26:49 UTC

It's worth remembering at such moments that all this is because of something that hasn't happened yet.

Please tell me this fic doesn't have an ending, because I'm going to headcanon Ginny, Ron, Fred, George, and Bill all getting together and fucking murdering Harry and Hermione in their beds. Hell, I'll throw in Lupin wolfing out on them as an added bonus!

Jesus, what the fuck was Robst thinking?

szaleniec1000 November 13 2012, 03:28:43 UTC

It gets even worse. Somehow. And yes, there's an ending. And it sucks.

sickbritkid2 November 13 2012, 16:35:31 UTC

Time for some heavy rewriting, then!

sith_droideka November 13 2012, 21:41:39 UTC

I keep trying, but it just isn't working!