Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 11 part 2

[szaleniec1000]

No, I've not given up.

Comments

[sickbritkid2]

We never get any indication of what this engrossing conversation was actually about.

Reminds me of Twilight, where the one moment of Edward actually asking Bella about herself is completely glossed over and we're given absolutely no details of who Bella is and what she likes, ect...

[szaleniec1000]

Like the bit where the CD she was listening to was described only as "my favourite band". Done well, things like that are a great way of adding depth to a character. (Done badly, we have pepperjacking and/or the author showing off how cool their favourite things are, which we'll see a lot more of in the story I'm sporking at the halfway point of HTE.)

[sickbritkid2]

Pepperjacking?

[taekarado]

as in pepperjack cheese. from pottersues:
Pepper Jack Cheese is a symbol of projecting ones own tastes and desires onto a canon character (thus transforming said character into an OOC Mary-Sue). It derives from a fanfic that described Hermione as liking pepper jack cheese because, as was explained in an author's note, it was the writer's favourite kind.

when done in small doses so that it doesnt compromise the existing character and/or it isnt obvious its your taste, this can be allowed for dimensionality purposes. when done wrong, it, well, transforms said character into an ooc mary sue.

[sickbritkid2]

The Headmaster looked at Jamie with surprise and then grinned.

He was secretly contemplating whether or not he could drop a bit of nightshade into Jamie's pumpkin juice.

[sickbritkid2]

Well, you could have fooled me.

Indeed. I wonder if Neil intended that sentence to be a subtle "passing the torch" reference...

[sickbritkid2]

“Yes, I imagine privacy is necessary when one has a perversion for adolescent girls.”

Burn!

Is it wrong that I'm now starting to think that Bullchip is the true hero of this story?

[szaleniec1000]

It's more of a Deserving situation, where everyone is so much of a dick that whoever wins we all lose.

[sickbritkid2]

Still, he's the only person, so far, who has actually pointed out that there is something completely wrong with a couple engaging in such activities with their children.

[sickbritkid2]

As for the life style being immoral, there is nothing morally wrong with my daughters preferring to be naked rather than clothed. What’s depraved is that bastards such as you see them as objects of lust rather than the innocent children they are.

"Unlike me! I roll around on the floor with them in naked tickle fights while allowing them to indulge in taking pictures of my pregnant wife in the nude for each trimester! This is totally nonsexual!"

[szaleniec1000]

It's so totally nonsexual that everyone has to spend every hour of every day going on about just how totally nonsexual it is!