Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 24 part 5

[szaleniec1000]

That this is supposed to be the last chapter of the first fic isn't stopping the author from going all out to find new and original ways to fail.

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[eaglevision1999]

The way they talk and discuss their plan in the open like this reminds me of Team Rocket from Pokémon and now I can't help but picture them as such.
I'm sure I've seem a handful of movies were the group of criminals hatch their scheme in a relatively public place, like a restaurant. I always found that odd.

Too be fair, whenever a story enables its dead characters to watch the living I can't help but wonder how much they're allowed to see. Gives me all sorts of wrong ideas. If I think about it, there's really only a handful of appropriate moments in life where I wouldn't mind to be watched without knowing, even by decreased loved ones. But an author should probably handle those thoughts more sensibly if they choose to bring them up in their story.

[szaleniec1000]

The way they talk and discuss their plan in the open like this reminds me of Team Rocket from Pokémon and now I can't help but picture them as such.

Same here now, and I've not even seen an episode of Pokemon for over ten years!

I'm sure I've seem a handful of movies were the group of criminals hatch their scheme in a relatively public place, like a restaurant. I always found that odd.

It happened in The Last War too, where Hermione confesses that she killed Ron to Harry right in the middle of a restaurant.

If I think about it, there's really only a handful of appropriate moments in life where I wouldn't mind to be watched without knowing, even by decreased loved ones. But an author should probably handle those thoughts more sensibly if they choose to bring them up in their story.It's a good point, and it could have been handled better by a competent writer. Instead we got "did you watch us shagging" as a more important question than, say, how they'd been or what actually happens when you die. The latter, in particular, I can

[sith_droideka]

Wrong: Prepare for trouble!
Damien: And make it double!
Wrong: To protect the world from devestation.
Damien: To unite all peoples within our nation.
Wrong: To denounce the evils of truth and love!
Damien: To extend our reach to the stars above!
Wrong: Wrong!
Damien: Damien!
Wrong: The Great One blasts off at the speed of light!
Damien: Surrender now, or prepare to fight, fight, fight!
Hooch: Hooch, that's right!

No, I didn't quote that from memory, I actually only remember three lines of it. I had to find the rest on Tropes. And Giovanni would be Salazar Slytherin, or maybe Voldemort.

[fly_buggy_fly]

Okay, I haven't finished this installment yet, but I have to comment: THE DOLLAR DANCE. UR DOING IT WRONG.

As some one from a large, Eastern European family, I have been privy to many dollar dances at weddings and usually, they are indeed about money. Traditionally, the money is given to the couple to use on their honeymoon.

Also, it usually ends (as per the Eastern European tradition) with the guests all circled around the bride afterward, clapping while she dances. Then the groom has to bust through and carry off his bride.

It's one of my favorite parts of family weddings :3

[sickbritkid2]

“Laura helped me to face my problems and comprehend that I treated you the way I did because deep inside I had developed a abhorrence of women; in all probability because of the way my grandmother had treated me as a child."

Neville's grandmother, who loved him and drove him to become a powerful and respectable wizard and hero in his own right, made Neville into a closeted rapist...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ect-kgxBb4M

[szaleniec1000]

It occurs to me with Neville that we're seeing Draco in Leather Pants and Ron the Death Eater applied to the same character in the same fic. First he turns him into a sex offender, then he tries to make him sympathetic anyway. And no, Mrs Longbottom senior doesn't deserve to be reduced to a (literal) Freudian excuse.

[zelda_queen]

Not to mention the unfortunate implications it carries. In the books, Neville Longbottom's grandmother was a cool old lady who was tough yes, but she wanted the best for her grandson and fights off Ministry officials and calmly heads off to help fight in the Battle of Hogwarts. And here, Neil strips her of all her strength and awesomeness and turns it into an excuse for Neville to have a damanged psyche and women issues.

[szaleniec1000]

Neil has a problem with strong women. It's clear from the way he treats Hermione. It's telling - and I said as much on TVTropes, under (of course) Unfortunate Implications - that the only character I'd legitimately consider a strong independent woman is the villain. Sure, we get all this talk about how Hermione is the most powerful witch in the Potterverse. And we do need to be told all the time because she never actually demonstrates it. She wows the girls by moving furniture around by magic, which any fifth-year could have done, and what was supposed to be her big badass sequence had her completely robbed of agency and running on what amounted to survival instinct.

[sickbritkid2]

She's apparently fallen for someone she's treating for being a pathological sex pest. I have to worry about her type. I'm not sure someone who's admitted a problem with women would be sent to a female doctor, either.

Not to mention just the sheer idiocy of a doctor dating her patient, even if he is switching doctors...

[sickbritkid2]

"H/Hr are popular and love each other"

And that's all we ever hear about their relationship, too.

"Harry, I wuvs you so much!"

"Mione, I wuvs you too!"

That's seriously how their scenes play out. Aside from the "great" sex(great as told to us by the author, despite the fact that he's incapable of writing a good sex scene), Harry and Hermione do nothing that would demonstrate their attraction and bond, like talking about or doing things that they enjoy together(which, ironically enough, is something that Hermione and Neville did together before Neil unceremoniously sank that ship), or anything, for that matter.

Their relationship is like the Bella/Edward relationship from Twilight, except 50x as disturbing due to the rampant fetish fulfillment and pedophilia.