Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 24 part 5

[szaleniec1000]

That this is supposed to be the last chapter of the first fic isn't stopping the author from going all out to find new and original ways to fail.

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[sickbritkid2]

“Laura helped me to face my problems and comprehend that I treated you the way I did because deep inside I had developed a abhorrence of women; in all probability because of the way my grandmother had treated me as a child."

Neville's grandmother, who loved him and drove him to become a powerful and respectable wizard and hero in his own right, made Neville into a closeted rapist...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ect-kgxBb4M

[szaleniec1000]

It occurs to me with Neville that we're seeing Draco in Leather Pants and Ron the Death Eater applied to the same character in the same fic. First he turns him into a sex offender, then he tries to make him sympathetic anyway. And no, Mrs Longbottom senior doesn't deserve to be reduced to a (literal) Freudian excuse.

[zelda_queen]

Not to mention the unfortunate implications it carries. In the books, Neville Longbottom's grandmother was a cool old lady who was tough yes, but she wanted the best for her grandson and fights off Ministry officials and calmly heads off to help fight in the Battle of Hogwarts. And here, Neil strips her of all her strength and awesomeness and turns it into an excuse for Neville to have a damanged psyche and women issues.

[szaleniec1000]

Neil has a problem with strong women. It's clear from the way he treats Hermione. It's telling - and I said as much on TVTropes, under (of course) Unfortunate Implications - that the only character I'd legitimately consider a strong independent woman is the villain. Sure, we get all this talk about how Hermione is the most powerful witch in the Potterverse. And we do need to be told all the time because she never actually demonstrates it. She wows the girls by moving furniture around by magic, which any fifth-year could have done, and what was supposed to be her big badass sequence had her completely robbed of agency and running on what amounted to survival instinct.

[sickbritkid2]

It's ultimately quite telling when Neil demonstrates issues with women that make M. Night Shyamalan, Neil LaBute, and even Duke Nukem go "Dude, that's just sexist!"

[zelda_queen]

I know what you mean. Luna, Katie, Hermione, Ginny, and even Pansy Parkinson are reduced to simple fanservice. McGonagall is gotten rid of entirely. Poor canon characters. :( *hugs*

[szaleniec1000]

I really hoped Luna would be spared. And as for Hermione, her portrayal in my latest update hits a new low.

[zelda_queen]

No, Luna gets it very bad. :( And very stupidly, seeing as her "problem" really shouldn't be one at all.

[szaleniec1000]

I figured from stuff you've said.

On which note: has anything good ever come from retconning characters and plots from Order of the Phoenix into a three-year summer fic? PoU went full AU and was better for it, and I think the Draco Trilogy did the same.

[sith_droideka]

I recall that in Rose Potter and the Half-blood Prince she suddenly spontaneously referred to side-along teleportation as difficult even though she had done it with Hagrid the fic before.

Tonks will appear next fic, by the way, and she (of course) doesn't have enough spine to stand up to the obviously bigoted auror captain person that's in charge of the raid on Ron.

[zelda_queen]

Well it's good in a "You stupid assclown" way, but it was utterly hilarious to watch Halcyon flounder and try to retcon Snape's personality to fit with how it goes in post OOTP canon, to the point where he couldn't finish the series.