FIC: Retrograde (QAF)(4/?)

[sweetestdrain]

I apologize for my block. Hopefully this will suffice for a little while, as I seem currently incapable of writing chapters of over two thousand words. Hmm. Yes. I'm gonna go take that nap now.

Thanks to ragingpixie for looking it over for me. And also thanks to burnitbackwards for enthusiasm, and cindelius cause she's cool. And other people. Etc., etc., moving on. >:D

Comments

[vedaprophet]

oh god. *sobs* wha, that hurt, omg! You are sooooo goooood!!

Here's where I started to choke up:

He set the picture gently on the nightstand, leaned it against the alarm clock. Gus's face grinned up at him, the faint glow of red numbers coming through his cheek.

Ugh, such a visual line. Stunning.

Here's where I went from meekly suppressing sobs to full out bawling:

"I don't love you!" Brian nearly shouted, his voice muffled by fabric. "How can I? I don't even know you! What the fuck do you want from me?"

Gah, the pain and the pleasure all rolled into one with this chapter! You are good!

Here's where I died:

The sky was dim with morning light, and Justin inhaled deeply, his lungs expanding with air and a horrible sense of relief.

*thud* I wish my lungs were expanding with any kind of relief, but alas they won't do that until you post chapter 5! ♥

*loves*

[shape5]

Wow. How soon will the next part be up? Because I'm not good with suspense, and you've gotten me even more emotionally invested in this than before.

Oh wow. *sniff*

[viola69]

Long ago now I remember having a discusion about the ... lack of *good* Justin-angst in fanfic- and you are just excellent at portraying that. Between this and Huster!Justin - well, just want to hug & care for your Justin who is in so much pain- and yet you've not made him martyr!Justin.

And this was wonderfully intense chapter. More please.

[aurora_84]

*bawls like a baby*

You really broke my heart with this. Shred it to a million tiny pieces...God, this is so painful and yet so good, so intense, so gut-wrenching.

Brian turned his face into the pillow, hiding his face. “I don’t love you,” he said.

Justin froze, the hair itching at the back of his neck, and wondered, quite casually, how long it had been since Brian last said that to him, and why he was saying it now.

“What?”

“I don’t love you!” Brian nearly shouted, his voice muffled by fabric. “How can I? I don’t even know you! What the fuck do you want from me?”

Cries at the thought of Brian not remembering their love...

Please make it better?

[paddies]

Please make it better?

OMG yes, please?

Note to self: don't read multi-chaptered angsty-stories until they're done. Too much angst. Cannot cope.

[terrisha]

Oh wow, I loved this chapter! <3