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[supehsunny]

Harry Potter fic.

Title: Twisted Logic
Characters: Ginny and Tom
Word Count: 465.
Rating: PG-13.
Summary: “I love you,” he tells her. The words, she now knows, are soft and sweet but deceitful and empty. Tom had made her whole. Tom had broken her. She wants to hate him.
Disclaimer: Own nada.

Comments

[heron_advocate]

Great fic! This is the kind of Tom/Ginny that I love. Ginny realizing that Tom is bad for her, but finding something a bit irresistable, even if she fights it every step of the way.

Couple of things:

She swallows these words as quickly as she can, scared he'll snatch them back if they doesn't envelope them soon.

Just some pronoun/verb disagreement.

“I hate you,” she replies once more and she wishes with all of her heart and soul that meant it.

I think you're just missing a "she" after "that."

Again, good job. ♥

[supehsunny]

ooh, thanks for helping me catch those! i'll go fix them!

and thank you very much for reading. i like this side of tom/ginny, the dark, irresistable side ... like tom himself.

[sarahblack]

A chilling read. Thank you. :)

[supehsunny]

thank you for reading! :)

[themadpuppy]

Great read. I like this irresistible pull towards evil that you managed, and the continuous repeat of "I love you", which was haunting-just like Tom.

[supehsunny]

mm, tom riddle. glad you enjoyed! :D

[herald_comm]

That was wonderful. I think you've really captured the essence of Ginny's feelings towards Tom.

I loved this line: When it didn't, she felt simultaneously relieved and disappointed.

[supehsunny]

I could always see that for Ginny, the small flicker of something that would occur when she wrote, at least for the first little while.

Anyway, thank you so much! I'm glad you think i did it justice.

[orpheus_samhain]

I love Ginny/Tom, I don't think she would be able to forget him *smirks* Good job!