[Fan Fic] - Queer As Folk's sagas : Later. Episode 03 : Reunion

[suns_writer]

Title: Reunion
Characters: Brian/Justin
Timeline: Post 513
Rating: R
Warnings: None
Author : sun_shined
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[positive_pat]

OK it worked I have friended you here and I see you have the 3 chapters posted. So you did not loose them.

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Pat

Mark

[anonymous]

Very nice work--and in such good English, too! Whatever made you decide to write them in English instead of French?

I like the way you build up to the reunion in part three. From Brian's reflections in part one to the road trip in part three, everything leads in that direction. Nevertheless, you stay true to Brian's character by making him dread not being THE man to have sex with in Pittsburgh. Clearly, his love for Justin is part love and part ego preservation. A lot of your description is also really nice, an example being the part where he blows smoke onto Mikey's cute nose.

In part one you sometimes refer to Mikey as Mickey (as in Mickey Mouse!). That's a different name.

The second and third parts and some of part one read very well, but in some of the first part I think you are trying too hard to show off your English with so many fancy descriptions. You can tone down the flowery descriptions and still have a great story.

Keep up the great work!

All the best,

Mark

Re: Mark

[suns_writer]

[QUOTE]Very nice work--and in such good English, too! Whatever made you decide to write them in English instead of French?[/quote

alexb11

[anonymous]

ohlala la suite, la suite !!! je m'imaginais deja la scene dans ma tete, je me demande ce qu'il va se passé ensuite, j'espere que justin ne sort avec personne d'autre car bryan a du faire des effort pour venir jusqu'ici !!! en tout cas merci sun_shined !!!

Alex...

Re: alexb11

[suns_writer]

Alors là avant que je la cases avec un autre celui--là... : D

Merci Alex! ^^

[anonymous]

Brilliant, Nicolas! I didn't expect less from you, though! I don't like it when you doubt yourself ... so stop it! :) I HOPE there will be a 4th part; you kinda left us hanging there when Justin answered the door! Love ya', as always ... Cindy