[Fan Fic] - Queer As Folk's sagas : Later. Episode 03 : Reunion
Title: Reunion
Characters: Brian/Justin
Timeline: Post 513
Rating: R
Warnings: None
Author : sun_shined
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Characters: Brian/Justin
Timeline: Post 513
Rating: R
Warnings: None
Author : sun_shined
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Thanks a lot. The texts you've read are actually translation from texts written in my language. Besides, my translations were corrected by a native speakers, even though mines aren't dreadful.
[quote]I like the way you build up to the reunion in part three. From Brian's reflections in part one to the road trip in part three, everything leads in that direction. Nevertheless, you stay true to Brian's character by making him dread not being THE man to have sex with in Pittsburgh. Clearly, his love for Justin is part love and part ego preservation. A lot of your description is also really nice, an example being the part where he blows smoke onto Mikey's cute nose.[quote]
ALLELUYAH! I can write something coherent! Phew ! I was doubting ! : D Thank you... :D
[quote]In part one you sometimes refer to Mikey as Mickey (as in Mickey Mouse!). That's a different name.[/quote]
Ok, I guess you're part of those who that is a pet peeve for. I will pay more attention next time. : )
[QUOTE]The second and third parts and some of part one read very well, but in some of the first part I think you are trying too hard to show off your English with so many fancy descriptions. You can tone down the flowery descriptions and still have a great story.[/QUOTE]
Thats is exactly what I feared...Sometimes, I wonder If I'm not smoking while writing... I think it's due to the fact that I write in French in a way is near to poetry.
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