[fic] Viewfinder: AU Drabble: Dance 2

[sunflower1343]

Title: AU: Drabble: Dance 2
Based upon: Viewfinder
Pairing: Asami x Fei
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: None
Warnings: AU

Notes: Fei dances for Asami

Yesterday’s fic had Fei dancing, but it descended into something other than dance. I wanted Fei to actually dance. Today’s fic comes closer to that.

Comments

[kawaiigato]

Let's see...I think you used up my "hotness" quota for the day. A dancing, swirling, strip tease.
Asami's breath quickened. Glad it did, or he'd have fainted *again XDDD*. He'd been holding it for what, 12 lines?

*runs before she is beaten*

[sunflower1343]

*shakes her head*

Twelve lines, but only a moment in time. Sheesh, description that takes 12 lines to describe takes only an instant to see. If I would have stopped his breath for just a second, it would have been a hiccup, and that's just not sexy.^^

[sunflower1343]

Here you go:

A page boy ran out and gathered the cloak, then dashed away, leaving a man standing there.

Asami hiccuped.

Fei threw his hands up in disgust. "Oh would someone get this man a dialogue coach? And for God's sake take away the wine!"

*sticks tongue out*

[kawaiigato]

Hmm. You're right. Not nearly as sexy. But it made me laugh *hugs*

And you really shouldn't have included the brown haired serving boy. During Fei's dance, I was standing at the back of the crowd in the banquet hall, on tiptoes, trying to see where his cuteness had run off to. I get distracted easily ^__~

Hmmm....poor His Excellency. Looks like he's got his appetite back. But I hear he's not too big on desserts. Too bad. But I bet that serving boy would make a good side dish...

[anonymous]

You can't leave this like that O_O Make a continuation !
... Anyway, loved it.

[char_sama]

Oh, wow. *blush* This was good. I love how you kept Feilong a MAN during this dance. Ooh.... *mumble*

[keleosnoonna]

I don't know how I missed this!
I love the way you described Feilong ♥ !!

[sunflower1343]

Thanks! ^__^ I like my Feilong manly.