[KiyoharuxTora] "The Good Samaritan", 04b/0?

[blindcottonlove]

"THE GOOD SAMARITAN", 04b/0?

BANDS/ARTISTS: Kiyoharu, Alice Nine, SCREW, Kagrra,, Danger Gang
CHARACTERS: Kiyoharu, Tora, Shou, Byou, Nao (ex-Kagrra,), Rei (ex-Danger Gang)
PAIRINGS: KiyoharuxTora (not the focus, though; see genres)
RATING: PG13-15 for the entire series, may get higher in the later chapters
GENRE: AU, adventure, action, crime

Comments

[ruru_ao]

Ohhhh... It was so unexpected... Also, It made me feel really... well... how to put it... Nervous? As if I was put in Shou`s place and was driving there to Kiyo`s thinking about telling the man that Tora was in trouble and partly because of me... So, your story is really emotional, and I hope you`ll post next chapter soon.

I`ll probably write more about all the characters but I`m just a little too shocked now, so, year, thank you sooooo much~

[blindcottonlove]

I love your reaction to the chapter! :D It's really flattering and fun to hear that the characters and the plot have so much effect♥ So, thank you for taking the time to read and comment, I really appreciate it :) I'm currently working on the next instalment, I'm trying to get it posted soon.

[bauci]

Oooh. Damn. I especially liked the last paragraph, leaves me craving for more. Action would be fantastic but I wonder if we'll get some more peeks into Kiyoharu and Tora's relationship? I wonder how their relationship came to be, hm.

[blindcottonlove]

:D There will be... well, a little more, I guess? They're not very eager to talk about it, so let's see if Shou manages to dig something up :)

I'm a sucker for cliffhangers. It's nice to see it working so well ;D Thanks for reading/commenting/being encouraging!<3

[xme_chanx]

Kiyoharu's house sounds nice.

OMG that last paragraph! He's not going to die, right? O_O
I love this story. Can't wait to see more. I'm glad you are better now, summer flu/colds ware the WORST.

[blindcottonlove]

Thank you♥ Yes, colds are horrible, I hate it when it's nice and warm outside and I'm stuck inside, sneezing my brain out :(

>D Not giving away anything yet! I just sit back and watch my readers squirm in excitement, lol. No, really, I'm glad the ending had a big impact :)

[ladyrevania]

Next day I would be in this car again, not on the passenger seat but behind the wheel, frantically trying to remember the route back to Kiyoharu's house. Tora would be missing, and it would take months for me to comprehend that I was partly at fault as to why he got caught that day.

Wow, sounds so surprising! I really can't wait to read more now, because I love action! Some extra twists would be nice actually, I would approve it :)

[blindcottonlove]

Haha, I'm making it sound like my gunfights and whatever will be totally awesome, although I'm shit nervous about writing action :D Well, I'll try my best, hopefully I'll manage something nice.

Thanks for reading<3

[suslik_san]

I adore all those small details about living in Kiyoharu's house. They're kind of endearing.

And wow for the last paragraph! Your style of narration sure is unique o.o
Can't wait for the next chapter :3

offtop: pardon me asking, but you're not a native speaker, are you? ^^

[blindcottonlove]

Thanks! :D I have a very strong image of the house, so although people are free to imagine it the way they like, I like to give as much details as possible to convey a bit of the vision I had on my mind. And, I'm glad the little hook at the end is working<3

Offtopic is my second nature, so feel free to shoot away ^_- No, I'm not a native -Finnish is my first language, English second. (Well, basically Swedish should be my second but I'm no good at it, lol.) So, I tend to make bunches of mistakes and because I don't have a beta, I don't mind people pointing them out :) (If that's where you were headed at? :D)

[suslik_san]

Actually I was talking about Shou falling into the pace of everyday routine - not everyone could pull it out as casual and natural as you did :3

No, that's not it xD It's not my place to point out whatever mistakes you have there since I'm not a native myself ^^' Though some pats do look funny and that's why I've asked - usually the grammar of your first language affects the way you speak in a foreign language, yours was somehow different to what I saw previously (I'm studying linguistics and kinda can't help noticing these things)

sorry to bother you with my nerdy questions ^^" XD

[blindcottonlove]

Well thank you :)

Aah, linguistics student :D I know a few myself, and I've heard them say the same thing at Uni! So you're probably right, it's inevitable that me being not native will show in the writing. Also, whenever I read a book in English, I tend to suck in style and vocabulary from the author. Now I'm reading James Herriot, so my writing's a fantastic mess of my own style and Herriot's very classic English narrative 8D Hopefully people bear with me, lol.

This is something that I sometimes notice and sometimes fail to notice, so if something absolutely weird shows up in the fic, word or sentence wise, feel free to comment on them! :D I'd like to improve my writing, so a critical reader would do no harm~