[KiyoharuxTora] "The Good Samaritan", 04b/0?

[blindcottonlove]

"THE GOOD SAMARITAN", 04b/0?

BANDS/ARTISTS: Kiyoharu, Alice Nine, SCREW, Kagrra,, Danger Gang
CHARACTERS: Kiyoharu, Tora, Shou, Byou, Nao (ex-Kagrra,), Rei (ex-Danger Gang)
PAIRINGS: KiyoharuxTora (not the focus, though; see genres)
RATING: PG13-15 for the entire series, may get higher in the later chapters
GENRE: AU, adventure, action, crime

Comments

[suslik_san]

I adore all those small details about living in Kiyoharu's house. They're kind of endearing.

And wow for the last paragraph! Your style of narration sure is unique o.o
Can't wait for the next chapter :3

offtop: pardon me asking, but you're not a native speaker, are you? ^^

[blindcottonlove]

Thanks! :D I have a very strong image of the house, so although people are free to imagine it the way they like, I like to give as much details as possible to convey a bit of the vision I had on my mind. And, I'm glad the little hook at the end is working<3

Offtopic is my second nature, so feel free to shoot away ^_- No, I'm not a native -Finnish is my first language, English second. (Well, basically Swedish should be my second but I'm no good at it, lol.) So, I tend to make bunches of mistakes and because I don't have a beta, I don't mind people pointing them out :) (If that's where you were headed at? :D)

[suslik_san]

Actually I was talking about Shou falling into the pace of everyday routine - not everyone could pull it out as casual and natural as you did :3

No, that's not it xD It's not my place to point out whatever mistakes you have there since I'm not a native myself ^^' Though some pats do look funny and that's why I've asked - usually the grammar of your first language affects the way you speak in a foreign language, yours was somehow different to what I saw previously (I'm studying linguistics and kinda can't help noticing these things)

sorry to bother you with my nerdy questions ^^" XD

[blindcottonlove]

Well thank you :)

Aah, linguistics student :D I know a few myself, and I've heard them say the same thing at Uni! So you're probably right, it's inevitable that me being not native will show in the writing. Also, whenever I read a book in English, I tend to suck in style and vocabulary from the author. Now I'm reading James Herriot, so my writing's a fantastic mess of my own style and Herriot's very classic English narrative 8D Hopefully people bear with me, lol.

This is something that I sometimes notice and sometimes fail to notice, so if something absolutely weird shows up in the fic, word or sentence wise, feel free to comment on them! :D I'd like to improve my writing, so a critical reader would do no harm~

[suslik_san]

ah, btw your English is pretty goooooooooood afaik ^^V