I Saw Her Standing There Chapter 6/?

[suburban_boho]

A/N: Thanks much to mollybeakers for getting me thinking about callouses and hands and spending way too long on Google images looking at drummers hands.
Rating for this chapter is a soft R. It gets a bit on the steamy side.
Disclaimer: I own naught, I know naught. All is fictional and no harm meant.

Comments

[jonesingjay]

The bit with the focus on Alice's hands, Maureen's fascination and appreciation of the smoothness of those hands is a deeply intimate moment between the young woman. For me, the most intimate and even telling moment in this chapter

[suburban_boho]

So you just out English-majored the English major, LOL.

I really didn't have any symbolism in the hands thing in mind, I just got attracted to the idea because of something mollybeakers posted on the Help community about hands and callouses and it stuck in my head that Alice, who would already have smaller and softer hands than Ringo, would also have no callouses and Ringo's callouses would be in a different place than the other three. So that's just another layer of comparison, and then, as I was writing it, I do like to have intimate moments that aren't sexual exactly. Clothed and outwardly innocent, but deeply felt and meaning a great deal. So that was my original intent, create a more emotionally intimate than physically intimate moment. It makes the relationship more than just an affair

[mollybeakers]

I wondered how your handsy research was going to show, lol. Wondering answered! As always I'm interested in detail, and this particular one adds SO much. Jay's observances regarding the rough/soft comparisons are on the mark.

Maureen is interesting as hell. You've done a great job of not making her the 'mature seductress' of cliche-ville.

It was a mark of extreme maturity (keeping in mind that she's still young herself) for her to see and understand Alice's primal loss of control (read: not thinking things through, very natural). And even better that she let Alice go instead of continuing to flog away at her point. She is confident in what is developing between them, and has the sense to understand that when Alice calms down the message will be absorbed.

And now I want to know what has robbed Alice of her confidence. I'm guessing it wasn't Nell... but her lack of self esteem is probably what made her initially attractive to Nell. Control freak. (it's true, I'm mad at her and want to blame her, lol)

Excellent chapter!

JB

[suburban_boho]

Wonder no more indeed, lol! That scene more or less popped into my head about the third or fourth slightly disturbing picture I found of drummer's hands. As it was, there was always going to be a comparison of Ringo's hands in general- very masculine and large and I was going to be vague on their roughness- to Alice's very small, soft, incredibly feminine hands. Then you put the callouses thing out there and I was hooked

[mollybeakers]

The best part: writing a bigger picture when you didn't even intend to. Awesome! I WAS waiting for Maureen to tap Alice's nose and mention her smaller neb... but that's just the goofy that appears in me sometimes. lol.

Yep, no cliches. You've made their story their own, and it doesn't feel rushed.

Even Alice and Nell aren't cliched. Their problems are right out front and instead of you naming the specifics, you're letting them do that. I like it.

JB