I Saw Her Standing There Chapter 6/?

[suburban_boho]

A/N: Thanks much to mollybeakers for getting me thinking about callouses and hands and spending way too long on Google images looking at drummers hands.
Rating for this chapter is a soft R. It gets a bit on the steamy side.
Disclaimer: I own naught, I know naught. All is fictional and no harm meant.

Comments

[jonesingjay]

The bit with the focus on Alice's hands, Maureen's fascination and appreciation of the smoothness of those hands is a deeply intimate moment between the young woman. For me, the most intimate and even telling moment in this chapter.

The references to the roughness of Ringo's hands, the palms of a drummer, but the fingertips without the same roughness. The same could be said of the man himself, smooth to those on the outside looking in, but for Maureen who knows the man, she knows the roughness of him. The real bits that the public doesn't see.

Alice's smoothness in comparison. Her own hands without the wear and tear. Just like her, quite soft on the outside and inside.

I can't say I'm disappointed that they didn't sleep together. Alice wasn't ready, and Maureen was respectful and understanding of it. I do understand that for someone like Alice, she would feel that she disappointed Maureen despite the reassurances otherwise. I can say that the bits of intimacy you did write between the two of them in this chapter were well written. You did a very good job with those parts.

The phone call in between those scenes was well done. Nice call backs to the past, that fit very well. They didn't feel out of place. So, kudos to you for that because switching from past to present and present to past can be jarring if not done properly, but I feel that your transitions were smooth.

I'm looking forward to reading more about Alice and Maureen's story. Good chapter. Thank you for sharing it.

[suburban_boho]

So you just out English-majored the English major, LOL.

I really didn't have any symbolism in the hands thing in mind, I just got attracted to the idea because of something mollybeakers posted on the Help community about hands and callouses and it stuck in my head that Alice, who would already have smaller and softer hands than Ringo, would also have no callouses and Ringo's callouses would be in a different place than the other three. So that's just another layer of comparison, and then, as I was writing it, I do like to have intimate moments that aren't sexual exactly. Clothed and outwardly innocent, but deeply felt and meaning a great deal. So that was my original intent, create a more emotionally intimate than physically intimate moment. It makes the relationship more than just an affair.

But now that you point it out, that's a really pretty brilliant observation. So hats off to you on that.

While they will sleep together at some point soon, I wanted to work on building them up, and Alice being, like many younger women, very primal brain driven. Her body wants and is ready, but the emotional toil would do some damage- virginity is so prized in a women at the time (still now but to less extent), not to mention the very fact that it would be with another woman, which is even more taboo back then. It would be too much, and Maureen, from a different perspective, being a mother and wife, maybe doesn't exactly regret starting her sexual life but with those two years and a rougher upbringing behind her, knows how important being ready is for that step.

Yes, Alice is a people-pleaser. She wants so badly to make others happy and this is the first relationship she's had that' physical at all. It's what she think's she 'should' do.

I'm glad the bits I did show came across well.

The transitions between flashback and phone calls are the hardest to make happen or feel right, natural, not forced so I'm super pleased they come off well.

Thanks for reading and commenting.