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22:: Fading Out

Jul 14, 2007 00:23

Title: Fading Out
Author: smurfyfredels
Rating: G
Word Count:100
Prompt: 22:: Unseen
Characters/Pairing: Marcie Ross

( And did you guys see his toupee? I mean, it looks like a cabbage )

021-030, minor btvs char, smurfyfredels, g, drabble, btvs

Comments 15

skull_theatre July 14 2007, 13:17:01 UTC

Mmmmmm....very true. Excellent!

smurfyfredels July 14 2007, 20:59:55 UTC

Thank you!

lauratd July 14 2007, 16:49:53 UTC

very sad, very good

I love the line "a paint by numbers version that would never be as good as the original. "

smurfyfredels July 14 2007, 21:01:48 UTC

Thank you, as I was writing this I suddenly felt awful for Marcie. I really liked that line myself, I did some rearrannging so I could keep it in so I didn't go over word count!

rayruz July 14 2007, 21:24:09 UTC

Wow... that "paint by numbers" line was very powerful

smurfyfredels July 14 2007, 21:49:05 UTC

Thanks! It was my favorite line in the whole piece and as soon as I started fiddling with the word count I knew I had to save it.

electricalgwen July 15 2007, 06:33:51 UTC

Nice. I like "their chipper, painfully identical yearbook inscriptions."

smurfyfredels July 16 2007, 01:14:46 UTC

Thank you! And I love your lj name. Gwen needs more love.

electricalgwen July 16 2007, 12:39:28 UTC

Aw, thanks! I do think they could have done more with her.

ubiquirk July 15 2007, 23:07:51 UTC

You do so much with so few words! These are especially wonderful:

She tried to become them; a carbon copy, a paint by numbers version that would never be as good as the original.

She was a waste of yearbook space. Their chipper, painfully identical yearbook inscriptions were proof of that.

smurfyfredels July 16 2007, 01:16:37 UTC

Thanks so much! Drabbles and fiddling with word count is always a fun little challenge for me, so glad it all seemed to fit in.