Probably one of my favorite chapters so far. I love your voice for Neku, if that makes any sense. The way you write thoughts and descriptions, you can still tell it's Neku that's the narrator, even if it's third person. You don't see that often.
All and all, wonderful chapter. The humor was priceless. :D /off to read the commentary
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I giggled over quite a few parts in here, especially the "shimmer" part. Hee.
Lovely as always and I was so glad to see another part. ^^
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A smirk behind the glow. "Unless you're unhappy being circumcised~"
*snork* Marvelous.
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Probably one of my favorite chapters so far. I love your voice for Neku, if that makes any sense. The way you write thoughts and descriptions, you can still tell it's Neku that's the narrator, even if it's third person. You don't see that often.
All and all, wonderful chapter. The humor was priceless. :D /off to read the commentary
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JOSHUA TAKES OFFENSE TO THE SPARKLES.
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YOU'RE RIGHT, JOSHUA'S TOO COOL TO SPARKLE. ALTHOUGH SHIMMERING IS STILL KIND OF GAY. ;3
Looking at the dates, were you putting off posting this to the comm or something? xD
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He doesn't care two shits about teh ghey XDD
And yeah, got delayed by life, XDD
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