Saiyuki, Sanzo/Gojyo/Hakkai/Goku, Seven Sins

[wordsofastory]

Title: Rise
Author: Brigdh
Previous Part: 1
Theme: Seven Deadly Sins - Greed
Rating: R for vague m/m interaction
Author's Note: 500 words. I suck at deadlines.

Comments

[ranalore]

Mmm, greedy, hot monkey. Can't say I blame him. *G*

I did spot three wobbles. The end of this sentence: hold it tight he'd never be alone or hungry or cold again. Then there's an extra space between that paragraph and the next, which is visually jolting. Also, "And even though Goku usually listening to Sanzo." You probably wanted that "listening to be "listened." *G*

[wordsofastory]

Dude, me neither.

I did spot three wobbles.

Oh, thank you. This is why I should really read things over more carefully before posting them, heh.

Then there's an extra space between that paragraph and the next

This doesn't show up on my screen, so I'm not certain I caught the glitch. Does it look fixed to you?

[ranalore]

All fixed, and dude, so hot.

[wordsofastory]

Goku, Sanzo and greed make for a pretty combination.

[mistressrenet]

He'd had nothing for so long and now he had so much, but he was afraid of losing it, and that just made him want it all more, he wanted to grab everything and hold it tight he'd never be alone or hungry or cold again.

GUH. Lovely.

[wordsofastory]

Thank you!

[gen50]

i caught this in a rec.
really good story.

[wordsofastory]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.