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st_minority

"Cleansing" - ch. 20

Jun 16, 2009 21:12

Holy fucking hell. It's been two months since I've updated this fic!

Title: Cleansing (ch. 20)
Rating: NC-17
Pairings/Characters: Tom/Doug, Doug/OC, Fuller
Disclaimer: I don't own 21 Jumpstreet, nor it's characters. All belong to Callen and peeps.
Warnings: M/M, slash, angst, language
Summary: After having killed a teen, Doug tries to comfort his ( Read more... )

21 jump street, slash, fanfic, m/m, cleansing, angst, tom/doug

Comments 23

rose_melody2 June 17 2009, 02:49:50 UTC

You must be psychic - today, I was going through your journal for the first time in months, and was about to msg you asking where you'd been.

But you're heeere now, so yay. :)

I missed this fic so much. And missed Tom/Doug in general. I can predict what will happen - they're gonna kidnap him again and rape him some more? *sighs* Oh, Tommy. :(

st_minority June 20 2009, 07:16:34 UTC

That I am. Ha, I wish. :) I could be an X-Men!

I miss them too! Where is the love? Like from you!!! You haven't done one with them in a while! Ah well. At least I know you still enjoy reading them. lol
They just might! ;) You know how evil I can be....

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st_minority June 20 2009, 07:17:31 UTC

Psh, I haven't even started thinking on chapter 21! lol And I need to. Tommy is NEVER safe!!! He's too pretty to be safe, haha

spookyfbi June 20 2009, 09:58:51 UTC

Random post here that has nothing to do with your fic: You need to get into the original series of Star Trek. Seriously, this show was, like, made for you, I swear! Kirk gets tortured basically every other episode! The Star Trek universe is choc full of sadistic aliens who are all drawn to him. Ok, there's this one episode which is basically torture without plot. It's called The Empath. If you can get your hands on it, watch it, you'll see what I mean. Kirk, Spock & Dr McCoy all beam down to this planet where they meet a young woman, and then these two aliens torture them. Their reason? They wanted to see if the woman would sacrifice herself for them, and if she did then they'd save her planet. There's another episode (Plato's Stepchildren) where Kirk, Spock & McCoy beam down to a planet because their leader is sick, but they don't have any doctors. So Dr McCoy fixes him, and then the aliens decide that they want Dr McCoy to stay. When he refuses, they torture Kirk & Spock. There's another episode (Patterns of Force) where Kirk & ( ... )

st_minority June 24 2009, 01:21:05 UTC

Oh god damn! You're right! I could tear into that shit! Damn it. I don't need another fandom! lol I'll have to look these up sometime. Are they explicit scenes of torture or just sort of....blah? Have you written any slash/torture/hurt/comfort stories for them?

spookyfbi June 24 2009, 05:49:53 UTC

On the one hand, yes they are pretty explicit (surprisingly so considering they were aired during family hour in the 1970s). But on the other hand, with cheap 60s special effects & all, it looks fake to the point of laughable. But you do get to see, for example, Kirk dangling from hand cuffs attached to the ceiling while the sadistic aliens do something to him (you can't see what it is because it's some sort of telepathic/telekinetic thing, but Kirk looks like he's in pain) see picture here http://allyourtrekarebelongto.us/theempath.htm... )

spookyfbi June 25 2009, 17:09:18 UTC

Visual aids - because you need to see how pretty tortured!Kirk is ( ... )

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Low Down on the Down Low! mariatenebre June 21 2009, 04:52:52 UTC

Thanks for another sensational chapter of Cleansing. I truly think it is the magnum opus of your fanfiction series. Though there is something I must address. Penhall is on the Down Low. He is having sex with Tom WHILE dating this Dianna woman. I think he is being a jerk to both Tom and Dianna. He is being a jerk to Tom because he is stringing him around and playing with his emotions. Which lets be honest are screwed up already enough. His is also screwing with this Dianna woman because he is cheating on her behind her back with ANOTHER MAN. It is funny because Penhall feels guilty for being forced to have sex with tom by the villains (which of course is understandable) but it seems like he feels no guilt about having sex with Tom one minute and dating this other woman the next! This really needs to be addressed in one of the other chapters. I do however like how tender and sweet Penhall is being to Hanson though. It is very loving and romantic. Though why don't you show some other characters dealing with Hanson and coforting him. Of ( ... )

Re: Low Down on the Down Low! st_minority July 30 2009, 06:23:42 UTC

So sorry for taking so long to comment! I think I was overwhelmed by your long comment that I was going to wait until I had a reply planned out and all, but never got around to it.

Anyway! Really, thank you for the nice long reply! It's really nice to hear you think this is one of the best of mine; I've worked so long on it and have had a good time on it that I'm thrilled people are actually enjoying it as much as I am writing it. Doug's gonna get caught playing both sides; that's for sure. He can't get off that easily. :) Tom is going to be more screwed up before he even starts back on a path of recovery/sanity. Gets worse before it gets better. lol As for Judy comforting Tom because she was raped, I haven't gotten to that episode! So I think as far as this story goes, it hasn't/won't happen to her. But she is such a kind figure that it would be nice for her to comfort Tom. Especially since he can't get any love from his mom. :/

Re: Low Down on the Down Low! mariatenebre July 31 2009, 05:20:22 UTC

Thanks for replying. It is Ok that you took a long time to respond. I after all have not been able to respond to alot of the comments on the forum and I know that we all have lives to attend to ( ... )

Re: Low Down on the Down Low! st_minority August 1 2009, 06:33:29 UTC

Man, you really know how to give motivation. :) I try not to be insecure about my writing, but it happens; and hearing how much you like it and how it is just makes me smile. Makes me want to keep at it!
I can't stand a cheater/player either. It makes me wish that Tom won't forgive Doug, but we all know he will.

If I had seen that episode, I'd definitely have Judy relating to Tom and trying to help him through it. But since I haven't, I don't want to go talking about things of canon that I haven't even seen. lol Ah well. I do plan on having her come in a little more later for Tom.
Ha ha! You are so deliciously evil toward Ms. Hanson. Love it. It's kind of been breaking my heart to write those scenes between them because god damn, he really needs the love of his mother after what he went through and trying to deal with it. Eventually, they'll come together and reconcile. :)

Thread 9

your story kidouchi June 25 2009, 13:38:15 UTC

Poor Tom , no more job and now two bastard free who want tortured him more . I love it , please write soon the next chapter.

Re: your story st_minority June 28 2009, 09:45:24 UTC

Indeed! He just can't cut a break! lol :D