Comments | squills: Fic: The Game (Mohinder/Sylar, PG-13)

squills

Fic: The Game (Mohinder/Sylar, PG-13)

May 14, 2008 18:15

Title: The Game
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Mohinder/Sylar
Words: 1375
Warnings: Mild slash. A bit of swearing. Sylar being creepy as usual.
Spoilers: Through the end of season 2.
Disclaimer: Not my characters, not writing this for profit.
A/N: This was written for the table I claimed at
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genre: angst, char: mohinder, genre: au, table: un_love_you, rating: pg-13, char: sylar, pair: sylar/mohinder, genre: fic

Comments 22

widestance75 May 15 2008, 00:00:42 UTC

This was soooo great. I loved the focus on that connection these two have - should I call it a visual connection? Just those intense looks between them that are so canon.

I think you've said you enjoy writing Mohinder more, but this Sylar POV was so freaking good. He's so devious. Plotting, planning, wishing they would get interrupted in person so Mohinder would get caught. And he just keeps fucking with him, touching his neck there at the end - and the door comment. So good!

“We’re coming.”
Sylar smiles even more broadly. “Now there’s a thought,” he whispers. WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!

squills May 15 2008, 01:00:57 UTC

You know, I think the reason that I end up writing Mohinder is that it can get really exhausting to write Sylar. I would like to see him get a little bit of humanity back, but if you write something close to canon, you have to face the fact that he's a bastard. I adore him, but it's oddly less stressful to view him through Mohinder's eyes than to be inside his head. Sylar may have enjoyed kissing Mohinder...but he enjoyed Mohinder's freakout even more. You can yell at him to stop it, but he just ignores you and keeps thinking up more loaded comments that he can make to embarrass Mohinder.

WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!

I HAVE NO IDEA WHERE THAT MOMENT CAME FROM. I was going to have Mohinder say something else, but instead, he said THAT...and Sylar answered him, like the devious little bastard he is. And then I started giggling. This is probably a sign of serious mental illness. Y/Y?

widestance75 May 15 2008, 01:12:19 UTC

Well if you have a mental disorder, I can think of about 10 other people who suffer from the same affliction. The fact that that moment came out of nowhere for you means you were fully entrenched in the man's head. Woohoo!

aurilly May 15 2008, 00:33:30 UTC

Phenomenal. Just phenomenal. Sylar is such a DICK here! Which, yes, he is, in general. I love the dirty joke that was in such terrible taste. I also love the private little moment when Patrick is around, and Sylar says that bit about the locks, and it's this little moment of tension just between the two of them that Patrick can't pick up on. I also really enjoyed MOhinder misreading the look Sylar was giving him.

The nightmare/daydream dichotomy is really amazing, too. There are so many layers to that tiny part. There are just way too many great parts in such a short fic. Love it! I'm glad I took this quick break from tagging. :)

squills May 15 2008, 01:21:23 UTC

I also really enjoyed MOhinder misreading the look Sylar was giving him.
You just know, it was the same unfocused look he had in Dale's garage. I will at least give Mohinder credit for figuring out that that look means bad things are about to happen... ;0)

I was just saying to widestance75 that it can be exhausting to write Sylar, because if you're staying close to canon, he has to be an utter jerk. But at the same time, I love reading him that way, especially when the horrible things he's doing are all psychological. And I quite enjoyed that awful joke because I think Mohinder would react awkwardly to a crude comment no matter who it came from...but from Sylar? It's a perfect way to batter Mohinder's psyche.

Thank you - I'm so glad you liked it!

squills May 15 2008, 01:22:36 UTC

Also, I went to tag this, and was like...CRAP. There aren't any other characters, the OC isn't important enough to be worth mentioning, it's not AU and isn't for a challenge. So after being all TAGS YAY!!!1!, I put two measly tags on it in the comm. Sheesh... :0)

aurilly May 15 2008, 01:46:03 UTC

Eh, no worries. There are a lot of fics that only have a rating tag and a fic taf. It's astounding how much better everyone has gotten about writing good headers. I started at the beginning and sesemperambo is going backwards, and I have to go so slowly because I actually have to link through and skim the fics to see what the tags should be. It's kind of cool to watch the evolution of Mylar. For like three months it was all "rating: r, roadtrip" beacause that's all people could imagine. Then it was all "5 years gone, rating: r". Now I'm in June and it's all Mywalker fluff. LOL.

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ladywilde80 May 15 2008, 01:02:29 UTC

Completely porn free and yet, this is without a doubt the single hottest thing I have ever read.

I have no words except NEVER. EVER. STOP. WRITING.

squills May 15 2008, 02:14:07 UTC

Oh, wow. THANK YOU. I'm so happy that this worked that well!!!

mabetini May 15 2008, 01:07:13 UTC

Holy god, this was DRIPPING with sexual tension! I squirmed the entire time and nothing more than a kiss happened...

I would give you my soul to keep writing ficlets like this one.

Mohinder looks shell-shocked as he shakily calls out, “We’re coming.”
Sylar smiles even more broadly. “Now there’s a thought,” he whispers.

BAHAHAHAHAHA!!! Oh Sylar...

Dear Mohinder's Gods this was hot.

squills May 15 2008, 02:51:40 UTC

Hee hee hee. I don't think Sylar is normally that crude, but it's the perfect thing to say to get under Mohinder's skin, isn't it?

I'm very very happy you like it!!! :0)

sinemoras09 May 15 2008, 01:56:26 UTC

oh HELL yeah!!

God, I love bastard!asshole!Sylar so so much. It's such a total mindfuck, I love it! :D

he reaches the other hand out and touches the door handle, and there’s the faintest of clicks as the tumblers of the lock give way.

“That’s the nice thing about having telekinesis,” he says. His tone is conversational, but his face is turned towards Mohinder’s ear, making sure every one of his words hits home. “There isn’t a door in the world that can keep me out.”

That's like the scariest/hottest thing I've read. PERIOD.

What Sylar wants, Sylar gets. Watch out, Momo XD

squills May 15 2008, 02:59:37 UTC

God, I love bastard!asshole!Sylar so so much. It's such a total mindfuck, I love it! :D

That was exactly what I was going for. It's awful how hot he is like that, isn't it? I love writing dialogue for him that has a double meaning, too - he says things in canon a number of times that seem perfectly innocent to people around him - "I'll get him later" - but really mean something awful.

I am glad that you liked it! ;0)