Kid Things, Chapter Six

[sowell]

Hmmm...what to say about this chapter...oh yeah! I want to pound it into little bits and flush it down the toilet! Hey! If I didn't have the rest of the chapters already written, this is the point at which I would've given up on this story. Seriously, though. Do you know how when you repeat a word over and over and over again it eventually loses

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[taken_with_you]

OMG, fucking FINISH already. GAHHHH *flails*

And I'm ready for you to redeem Logan now, please. :-D At least a little, wittle bit? For me? Pwease?

Favorite part: "Logan Echolls," a rough voice called, cutting into their argument. She whipped her head around to see an immense, bald-headed, wife-beater-sporting mountain of a man staring at them from the doorway of the building. His Neanderthal eyebrows were drawn together, and he didn’t look happy. Her uneasiness started tumbling toward fear.

You just have such a way with words, from describing the setting to human emotions to actions. You rock.

[sowell]

Yay! Thanks for commenting. Logan's redemption is on the way, I promise. I have to admit, though, I love an evil Logan. He's at his most vulnerable when he's acting utterly unrepentant. Man, I love Logan.

[taken_with_you]

You and me both, sister.

Damn, it sucks being gay.

Um, kidding. :-P

[aerynvala]

Oh big ow! But utterly perfect in every way. This line was my favourite, as it really sums them up well: And if he fucking died on her she didn’t know what she was going to do.

[sowell]

I hope it's a good "ow". Seriously, this chapter caused me more problems than I can possibly say, so if it evoked any sort of emotion other than "blech" I'm ok with it.

[secrets_and_lie]

I well understand the blindness that comes with overanalyzing your work, but this was really good. Packed a punch. Intense and scary, with a well-earned emotional kick to the aftermath. I love-love-loved Veronica having the presence of mind to offer Logan's car to Scary Dude, and I laughed when she enticed him with air conditioning. Also loved Logan's asking if Percy wanted a swing at him too. Hee. (Poor woobie kid, crying in the dirt, though. Waa.)

But man has Logan ever hit bottom in this story's backstory. I hope he's really been undercover or something to take the edge off the heavy duty drug trade milieu. I trust you, and I'll stick by it even if he's truly that screwed up, but whoa.

(BTW, I lived in LA for years; if you need any info on the city just leave your email address on my LJ and I'll write you. Of course I wasn't hanging out in South Central, so I may not be as useful as all that...)

[sowell]

Thanks so much for the feedback. Yeah...I like to think of Logan just completely lost without Veronica, like he doesn't know how to use his own moral compass unless he has someone there holding his hand through it.

Thanks for the offer of LA info. Only a very small portion of the rest of the story takes place there, but it's good to have a resource. I've only been there once or twice, so I'm going off very hazy memories.

[faux_truth]

Okay. I am willing to pay you money, do a sexy booty dance, and/or give you my firstborn if we can have another chapter PRONTO!! I am in love with this fic. Its totally amazing. And I am DYING to know what happens. Great job! Suspense effectively built. Now hit me :P

[sowell]

Another one coming within the week, I promise. This was the absolute *worst* chapter to write, and the others are already completed, so it shouldn't be too long. Thanks for commenting!

[bijal]

GOD. I know there are other people reading this (duh), but it is like you are MOCKING ME when you mention how this story is completed and you end it there and there is no more to read until probably next week and I am thinking, oh no she didn't, but YOU DID and how is that I can still find Logan all hot and sexy even when he is so fucked up? That is not healthy shit. YET? I do. And I am unashamed. And we all know Veronica does, even if she is maintaining a decent grip on denial.

Man. This chapter was intense with the beating Logan up and the gun and the big scary dude promising his equivalent of hellfire and damnation. I loved it. I love that Logan is still a fuck-up and all about acting and speaking first before he thinks. I love that he can't *not* snark. I love that he's still got a warped sense of nobility and responsibility. I love that he was all indignant about giving up his car (dude, seriously, GIVE HIM you car). I love that Veronica's reaction mirrored her reaction in Ahoy Mateys. I love that she hit him because he so

[sowell]

Wheeeeeeee! Such a beautiful outpouring of love. I have to get out another chapter of Break It Down (aka The Adventures of Mac and Weevil) before I let myself post another chapter of this.

Yeah, I always just think of him taunting his father in S1, even though he KNEW he was going to get a beatdown for it. He's such a masochist when it comes to himself, but when it comes to Veronica (or his mother, or his sister, or Hannah, etc.) he gets so serious and protective. Dude, Logan Echolls has made masochism hot.

I'm glad the intensity came through. I was just so freaking disenchanted by the time I actually went to post this...I still can't really read the whole thing through without cringing. Anyway, new chapter asap, I promise.