House, ch. 7

[sowell]

Title: When the house falls down (7/12)
Author: sowell
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Swearing, characters being mean, general lack of hearts and rainbows, um....melodrama? Also, spoilers up through manga issue 418, both in fic and author's notes.
Genre: Action, adventure, friendship, romance, aaaaaaaaaaaangst
Wordcount: 3,159
Summary: When the house falls down,

Comments

[eli_artemisia]

he has idea how Naruto still has the energy to fight Typo

O_O I can sympathize with your dissatisfaction over a piece of writing because no matter how many times you edit it, it just doesn't feel right, but I still thought it was a good chapter. It definitely ended with a BANG, WTF!

Konoha will go on as it has for four generations, bathing in its bloody peace at Uchiha’s expense.

I love that line. I feel ya Sasuke. Even I get pissed off thinking about how Konoha screwed his family over and how they would totally get away with it had Madara not informed Sasuke about what "really" happened and set him on another path of revenge!

Still reading, still just as excited as ever with each new update. <3

Much Love,
Marysia

[sowell]

ARG, TYPO! Fixed, thanks. :) Next time I start something this big, I will snag a beta, for sure. Glad you enjoyed it, even though to me it's never...quite...fit.

Even I get pissed off thinking about how Konoha screwed his family over and how they would totally get away with it had Madara not informed Sasuke about what "really" happened and set him on another path of revenge!

I know. On the other hand, if Madara is to be believed, then the Uchiha's really were planning a rebellion, which is also not cool. But poor teenaged Itachi, all caught in the middle. Sniff.

[centimetre]

can I take this and make a doujinshi out of it plz plz plz

[sowell]

Haha, plz plz do as long as you link me to it when it's done. :)

[centimetre]

NAW MAN I'M PRINTING IT OUT AND TAKING IT TO FUCKING NS ONLY IN JYA-PAN

it ain't goin online :B PHYSICAL COPIES FOR ALL

YOU WANNA BE THE WRITER FOR THE DOUJIN CIRCLE??? I GOT starfreckled AS SCRIPT WRITER AND nayama AS TYPESETTER/TRANSLATOR AND I have another friend who can maybe be a secondary artist and maybe we can all tone or something but so far ...nothing YET

*DREAM BIG*

[sowell]

Hee, I know nothing about the doujinshi-making process, but feel free to use my words whenever. :)

[libraire]

Sasuke. I agree with the chapter title. :|

Excellent chapter, as always. I think you handled Naruto's level of...upset rather well, I always find it so hard to judge when the Kyuubi would come in. But it flowed really well! :D

[sowell]

I think you handled Naruto's level of...upset rather well, I always find it so hard to judge when the Kyuubi would come in.

Thanks. Yes, that was one of the things I was really unsure about in this chapter - when to bring the Kyuubi in. I'm glad it worked for you.

[istne_pieklo]

I usually hate all my chapters and nothing can change my mind about them... but this story is just soooo beautiful, so I can't pretend I understand what you dislike about this chapter)))) And the ending had me jump up on my seat.

[sowell]

My chapters usually start out really messy, but eventually take on some sort of order as I edit. For some reason, I could never figure out how to order this one properly. It still feels a bit awkward to me. But I didn't want to cut anything else, and I didn't have anything else to add, so it is what it is I guess.

Glad you're still enjoying it!

[rabid_fangrrl]

SQUEAL!

You know, wow.
Not that Naruto looks like he’s planning to evade anything. He’s just staring fiercely at Sasuke, not giving an inch. His chest is heaving with exertion, but there’s no fear in his posture. Either he doesn’t realize he’s about to die, or he’s angry enough not to care. The stupid idiot probably doesn’t understand how much it’s going to hurt, how quickly it will be, how he won’t have a chance to come up with one of his asinine plans to save the day. He probably doesn’t know that once Sasuke touches him he’ll just be dead, gone, vanquished, finished, erased. He’ll never even get the chance to see Konoha go up in flames, to try and save it with his stupid clones and his stupid frogs and his stupid speeches. He’ll never open that loud mouth again, and Sasuke won’t have to hear him talk or yell or cry or gloat or…This chunk was my absolute favorite - that coupled with Sasuke wondering about the short circuit in his brain that won;t allow him to off Uzumaki

[rabid_fangrrl]

Oh my gosh! I waited so long for you to update and I happened to read zrina's sound of dreams and just pathetically pining for an update to dreams of fire... in the interim

[sowell]

Thanks, I'm glad you decided to read!

I kind of thought the dobe went with Kyuubi too soon but heck all so utterly in character and believable

One of my main gripes with this chapter was when/how to bring the Kyuubi in. I don't think there's all that much consistency to it in the manga, so it's a little hard to judge and make it seem in character, you know? I like it better when the Kyuubi stays inside and and Sasuke talks to it. :)

I just hope he gets to kick Saucegay's butt as Naruto with his own power and chakra rather than rely on Kyuubi

Mmm, that comes later in the story. :)

Most of the rest of the story is written, so the updates shouldn't be too far apart. Just some editing. And like I said in the notes, this chapter was really a bitch to write. The rest is sort of downhill, in a good way.

[sowell]

You know, wow.

Thanks!

This chunk was my absolute favorite - that coupled with Sasuke wondering about the short circuit in his brain that won;t allow him to off Uzumaki.

You know, I'm really glad you said that, because I came thisclose to cutting that whole thing. I wasn't sure it fit, but I liked it on it's own, so it's nice to hear that you liked it, too!

What a tool. Don't stab your boyfriend - is bad!

Haha, that about sums it up.