Fanfiction: Wake Up Heart (chapter 1, part 2)

[soliandxpyne]

Damnit.

Goku sent another of his attackers skidding through the dirt, having knocked him unconscious, but not killing him.  Sanzo and Gojyo would pitch a fit, he knew, but something about this group of youkai seemed...off.  They didn’t seem crazy--well, anyone who took them on with such low-level powers was crazy--but they weren’t “crazy

Comments

[purpleicicles]

Wow, so much of this I liked - the way you keep giving us little snippets of the two sepearate timelines is fantastic, because it works in so well with the different versions flying around of what actually happened; the interaction of the two different pairings is excellent, particularly at the bit where Sanzo walks into Hakkai's room and startles Gojyo, which is my favourite bit after that 'marry me' of Gojyo's :) Also loved the darkness and the offestting humor in parts which is very consistent with the style of the manga. The whole plot is great too, with the setup of the youkai's reasoning, etc. The fear associated with Goku's actions is near palpable too, and charges everything with very intense emotion. When's the next part up? ;D

[soliandxpyne]

Thank! X) The switching-timelines was a bit tricky to work, but I like how it came out. And for some reason, I find Gojyo and Hakkai's relationship more fun to write when it's not from either of their POV, lol. ^^;; I tried have a good balance of darkness and humor, and I'm glad you thought I pulled it off well. And there's still must more to come on the plot, you don't even know, hee. :D

Next part should be up later next week.

[purpleicicles]

Gah! Excitement attack! Wheeeeeeee!!!

[empyrealfantasy]

....I love chu. Forevars.

Leslie finally got me reading this... and wow. I'm soooo gonna be on yer ass to write more once I'm done, dear. XD

[soliandxpyne]

Eee, I'm glad you like. ^_^

Haha, let's not mention the fact that I could probably benefit from that...