Comments | smiles_a_lot: The Dance - Chapter 16: Start Me Up

smiles_a_lot

The Dance - Chapter 16: Start Me Up

Jul 30, 2008 09:39

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Genre & Rating: Canon/AU, R for smex and a definitely dirty use of leather.

Disclaimer: Jack and Ennis were created by the Great and Mighty Annie Proulx. I'm just the dude behind the yellow curtain working the lights and using the Big Voice microphone.

Summary: This is the continuation of The Package, and takes place after Ennis and Alma's divorce ( Read more... )

smiles_a_lot, the dance

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fizzerbass July 30 2008, 14:22:59 UTC

Hee! I get to be first! Ah, the benefits of stay-at-home recuperation ( ... )

smiles_a_lot August 1 2008, 04:57:47 UTC

Hey there my Jello-Tree:

Glad you liked the oiling the saddle section. Figured you might. Or was that lubing the saddle? Anyways, I've wanted to write that scene for a very long time. It's a bit of a challenge to write a "leather" scene into a canon fic. This one took hours of research and many trips to the thesaurus to figure out different ways to say "thrust."

As for the rest, I know. Poor Ennis. I'm sorry. I hope the image that I gave you, of him leaning against the saddle stand will comfort you.

Oh and thanks for your comment over on DCF. *blushes* You make me brave. My hero. xx Em

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smiles_a_lot August 1 2008, 05:00:48 UTC

I think what you say here is very true: I have the feeling that Jack is just so ultra-sensitized to any sign of rejection, even if it's fleeting, that he was ready to fly off the handle at the next provocation. Thank you, I'm looking forward to my vacation. See you when I get back!

tmn1966 July 30 2008, 15:03:03 UTC

OMG! How quickly a smile can turn into tears. Geesh, Em, you ripped me up with this chapter. I don't blame Jack for getting all upset, nor do I blame Ennis for his reaction. There are still things to be worked out between them. It's a new and fragile thing they've got going on here. Wow! What a chapter!

I hope you have a fabulous time and get some rest and have loads of fun!

Okay, just have to say it one more time, this was an excellent chapter, sweetie. Thanks so much!

Much love and hugs,
Teri

smiles_a_lot August 1 2008, 05:02:49 UTC

Hey baby - Glad about the smile, sorry about the tears. Thanks for understanding where both the boys were coming from. Yes, rest, that would be the plan! Huggers and smoochees. Em

The heights always seem to be matched by the depths ... mississaugared July 30 2008, 15:38:01 UTC

It's so true, what they say - the higher you climb, the further you have to fall.

First you have us sighing with pleasure at JACK's contentment from being with Ennis. Then you have us thudding and drooling over impromptu riding lessons, dear lord *thud* - btw, LOL at Jack thinking his whosit was doing it's best impersonation of a dead man rising, LMFO ( ... )

Re: The heights always seem to be matched by the depths ... smiles_a_lot August 1 2008, 05:14:46 UTC

Hey there E-ster Bunny:

No need to apologize, my bellini swilling friend, your comment was freaking amazing! Wow! You've obviously put a lot of thought into this chapter.

A few people have commented on the "revulsion and disgust" part of Ennis' look. All I can say is we're in Jack's POV, so it's Jack telling us Ennis looked that way. As much as I'd like to give you a reply equally as long as your comment, I have to keep my cards close to my imposing bosom at the moment. I can say I think you make some very valid points. Thanks for all your help on this chapter, giving me a shoulder to cry on, and sharing a few fruity drinks with me. Maybe the Missy in this story has lousy timing, but the original Missy always seems to get it right. Much love, Em

bagel1 July 30 2008, 16:12:02 UTC

Ummmmmm.........well where in the bloody hell have I been??????? (whacking my head with a hammer ( ... )

smiles_a_lot August 1 2008, 05:26:03 UTC

Hi Joanne!
Well, *unrolls welcome mat* thanks for joining us here in the Den. Your comment was amazing. Crikey. I had to look up the word sublime, but I blushed when I figured out what it meant. ;) I know this is going to sound like I'm fangurling myself, but if you like this chapter you will really love the others. I've tried to use at least one image from the previous chapter and carry it into the next, so there's a feeling of continuity but, also, it's created a few little inside jokes that you won't get unless you've read previous chapters. So the "stay-breathing" rule that you enjoyed is actually a reference to a huge element in Chapter 15. Anyways, so glad to have you on board. You mentioned feeling overwhelmed, well the feeling is mutual, sister. Thanks so much. - Em