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[slybrunette]

Title: Cheers Darlin'
Fandom: Lost
Characters/Pairings: Jack, Shannon
Word Count: 504
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: astra2104 wanted fic with the prompt 'Ice'.
Summary: A bar. Him. Regrets and failures swallow him whole and his hand shakes around his half-empty (and it is always half-empty) glass.

The story begins the same way they all do.

A bar. Him. Regrets

Comments

[elise_509]

Jack's spending so much time in bars this luau! This encounter with Shannon is fantastic: I love the note you made of her voice, and how when she speaks harshly and bluntly she sounds more like the Shannon he knew. I also loved the detail of the sound of glasses clinking and ice suddenly making his head hurt.

[slybrunette]

I think it's just the easiest place to set things. Lacks originality but you know, we're all bound to repeat ourselves.

I'm glad you thought she sounded more like Shannon. I wanted her to be that harsh, bitchy girl he knew. No room for vulnerability here right.

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[alemyrddin]

oh, poor Jack. He must think he's losing his mind...
very eerie, Shannon's vision and then her voice, speaking in the wrong way at first (you made me think it was someone else in Shannon's ghost form! eek!), then being herself again... it's so tragic, but beautifully done.

[slybrunette]

Yes, that would be the general conclusion. But really, I don't think that's what this would be about, not for him, or really Hurley for that matter.

And as for Shannon -- she can really be just about anyone I think, hence the way her voice seems to change. It's hard to tell what's an act.

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[inthekeyofd]

Shannon is haunting him, but if it's enough for him to leave the bar early, it's not a really bad thing.

But I love how you described what Shannon is, a manifestation of guilt, yes, perfect!!!

Now I'm wondering if she did follow him home.

[slybrunette]

Yeah, at least she's a good ghost, lol.

And I wonder if she did too. Maybe. That can be left to the imagination :)

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[tinkerbell99]

Yay, Jack/Shannon! I love that she appears to him - haunts him in a way. Creepily wonderful :-)

[slybrunette]

Aw, I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[eponine119]

I love this! The writing is so plain but it says so much. Great work here.

[slybrunette]

This was something I had an idea for but didn't have as much time to make it flowy and detailed -- you do what you can with the time and limits you are given right?

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!