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Jul 21, 2008 17:39

Title: Cheers Darlin'
Fandom: Lost
Characters/Pairings: Jack, Shannon
Word Count: 504
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: astra2104 wanted fic with the prompt 'Ice'.
Summary: A bar. Him. Regrets and failures swallow him whole and his hand shakes around his half-empty (and it is always half-empty) glass.

The story begins the same way they all do.

A bar. Him. Regrets ( Read more... )

fandom: lost, !fic, character: lost: shannon, challenge: lostsquee, character: lost: jack

Comments 22

astra2104 July 21 2008, 22:01:07 UTC

Oh, I love this!!!

It has a really creepy, but still so realistic tone, and poor Jack - seeing ghosts everywhere, and then Shannon of all people

It’s harsh. It’s Shannon. At least that’s something.

*sighs* Great lines.

Ha, this was the perfect read before going to bed, thank you so much for this! ♥

slybrunette July 22 2008, 01:56:40 UTC

Aw, I'm so, so glad you liked it! I kind of struggled with it but I wanted to do something -- at least try to get to the people on my flist.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

halfdutch July 22 2008, 01:14:15 UTC

Love the use of the prompt. And oh, wow, chills. I thought this was going to be a pre-island meeting but Shannon as a ghost (and not a very happy one at that!) is so effective. And oh, Jack. I just want to take care of him when he's like this. Excellent fic!

slybrunette July 22 2008, 01:55:25 UTC

I figured pre-island had been done to death and so I figured this was as good as any.

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

aboutbunnies July 22 2008, 05:12:03 UTC

Oh, this is wonderful. How creepy, but so well done! Of course ghost!Shannon would be that direct and harsh. Poor Jack. The last line is particularly effective.

slybrunette July 22 2008, 13:10:44 UTC

Aw thank you! I figured, you know, Shannon wasn't all fluffy bunnies in life, why would she be in death.

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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slybrunette July 22 2008, 13:11:39 UTC

Hee, I wish she would, but that's a whole other story now isn't it.

I'm glad you liked this hun! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

siluria July 22 2008, 16:59:26 UTC

This a really well-written moment. You can completely see Jack and Shannon, feel the atmosphere and the touch. Excellent!

slybrunette July 24 2008, 16:44:13 UTC

I'm glad you thought so :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!