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Mar 24, 2008 21:41

Title: Stand Up When Your World's Crashing Down
Fandom: Lost
Characters/Pairings: Juliet, mentions of Locke and Sawyer
Word Count: 220
Rating: PG
Prompt: HERE
Summary: She doesn't believe her own eyes until she walks outside.

The sky turns purple.

A storm rolls in and through the thick clouds the sky colors violet. And she remembers the last time it did ( Read more... )

fandom: lost, character: lost: juliet, !fic, table: fanfic100

Comments 26

cleuchi March 25 2008, 23:00:16 UTC

That was just stunning! Short but very full of emotions, I really enjoyed it :)
Only Sawyer looks down, regret in his eyes. ♥

slybrunette March 26 2008, 18:34:56 UTC

Thank you! I guess the message I'm getting out of these reviews is short can be good sometimes :)

I'm glad you liked this!

aboutbunnies March 26 2008, 04:42:56 UTC

Oh, wow. This is just a perfect use of the prompt. The purple is used in such a wonderful way; the mood is so eerie and foreboding. Juliet's yelled question actually makes me ache for her, which is a feat in and of itself. And Sawyer, looking down and regretting...Oh, poor Sawyer.

The last two words are...guh. Perfect.

slybrunette March 26 2008, 22:10:15 UTC

You know how when you've known something all along and no one believed you until it happens. And you want to shove it in their face. I think that's how Juliet feels with this, I think that's how she may feel in the future.

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading!

alemyrddin March 31 2008, 11:27:03 UTC

ouch! This is perfect with that picture, and it's something I could see happening... being on that island forever would be something unbearable.
Very well done.

slybrunette April 2 2008, 20:44:53 UTC

It would be since that would technically mean they wouldn't ever be safe, but you have to consider that that may happen...

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading!

elise_509 April 4 2008, 04:43:19 UTC

“Do you still think you made the right choice?” She yells to everyone and no one, straining to be heard over the rain. Locke just looks up at the sky like he wants to ask why things aren’t going his way. Only Sawyer looks down, regret in his eyes.

It's amazing that you so perfectly characterized three people with just those three sentences. You really have a remarkable way of saying a great deal with clarity and brevity. Haunting and beautiful fic!

slybrunette April 6 2008, 03:06:07 UTC

I see a lot of stories that wrap things up in a sentence or two and I admire that. I want to be able to have my sentences mean a lot, be poignant, and not be too wordy. So I was trying to do that here. I'm glad you thought I accomplished that :)

Glad you liked this!