Comments | shyriann: Finally, it's done.

shyriann

Finally, it's done.

Jul 25, 2010 03:17

Title: The Seven Virtues of Lisa Braeden
Rating: R (swearing, sexual content)
Characters: Dean/Lisa, Castiel
Length: 5500 words
Spoilers: General through season 5, heavy for 5.22
Summary: Coda for 5.22. Castiel watches from between heaven and earth, checking in periodically on Dean.

Author's Note: This is an honest attempt to resolve for myself ( Read more... )

dean, lisa, castiel

Comments 41

strgazr04 July 25 2010, 07:47:27 UTC

It's 4am and I am this close to crying but it was so worth it. I really hope you make this a verse. It's stunning.

shyriann July 26 2010, 03:33:10 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it. I really hadn't even thought about writing a verse out of this, but I suppose there's more to the story, and I promise I'll consider it.

strgazr04 July 26 2010, 03:46:41 UTC

so happy to hear that!

btw where is ur icon from? it's awesome! is it part of a fic or something?

shyriann July 26 2010, 04:33:37 UTC

Actually, I made this icon in response to a delicious piece of porn lylithj2 wrote a while back, where the boys were hunting vampires at a goth club and had to dress up to blend in. Dean ended up on the collar end of the leash, and the image of Dean in a collar and eyeliner inspired me to photoshop up an icon of exactly that.

raloria July 25 2010, 08:53:18 UTC

This is lovely. Great imagery and I love how you've told it all from Cas's point of view.

shyriann July 26 2010, 03:34:20 UTC

Thank you for the lovely comment. The POV was hard to come by, but in the end it was just the right choice for this story. Glad you liked it.

monkeyfun1 July 25 2010, 08:57:38 UTC

This was visceral, I felt for Lisa every step of the way. I could see things through Castiel's eyes and felt like crying for Dean. I like how good Lisa is for Dean in this fic. It gives me some hope for the coming September... Thanks for writing.

shyriann July 26 2010, 05:20:49 UTC

Thank you for reading, and for commenting.I'm glad you enjoyed it.

that was saramalou July 25 2010, 10:56:17 UTC

just wow! I don't even know what to say! I don't tend to like castiel in fics, but his point of view made the story so raw, and yeah, like you said, I see this as a plausible description of Dean's life with Lisa. Really well done!

Re: that was shyriann July 26 2010, 05:23:29 UTC

I chose Cas for the POV on purpose, for exactly the reasons many people don't like him. He's detached, and doesn't always understand what he's seeing or hearing, and that let me use him to describe the beauty of human love from a unique perspective. It also allowed me to use him to describe things that humans can't see, like the lights of their souls. I'm very glad it worked for you.

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shyriann July 26 2010, 05:32:28 UTC

The Cas POV wasn't my first choice. One of the reasons it took this long to get this posted is because the story was originally in Lisa's PoV and it just was not working. I realised that to get the emotions from Dean too, I'd need way too much exposition, so I needed an omniscient narrator. Once I decided that, Cas immediately popped into my mind, and the story just flowed out like it had been waiting to be written. I can't imagine using Cas as a humor device right now, the growth he went through in season 5 made him perfect to explain how hard it is to be human. I'm really glad I got Lisa for you. I really love her as a partner for Dean, and I'm a little sad that I'm sure the writers aren't going to let her keep him. But then, she knows that, too... hence the ending. They both know she may never see him again, but they both want to. I can't picture it any other way. Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback, comments like this are the Wheaties that help writers grow up big and strong!